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An Affair with Letters

by MacFrantic

Member since 2003 · Posted 8 Jul 2006 · 7 comments

A moment Before she Came to me, Delilah, quite Entirely, was Found in Grips of sanity, Haunted by Impurities. Juliet was Kindly told, Lately, that her Mind was bold. Now her Overbearing hold Presses closely; Quiet, cold. Rosalina, surely Spinning from The Lord's Untimely sinning, Veils her Wares in Xylose, thinning Young again; a Zealot winning

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[6] Dovina 8-Jul-06/3:30 PM Reply
What could you possibly mean by "The Lord's untimely sinning" besides something to rhyme with thinning and winning and starting with W? What point is there here?
[n/a] MacFrantic › Dovina 8-Jul-06/5:37 PM Reply
I could possibly mean what the title plainly says. It's about affairs and "The Lord's untimely sinning" seems to suit an affair. Oh, and "The" does not begin with W. I see no point in your comment.
[6] Dovina › MacFrantic 8-Jul-06/5:53 PM Reply
"The" clearly begins with a T, my mistake there. But other than a hodgpodge of supposed affairs, arranged around the alphabet. what is the point?
[10] ALChemy › Dovina 12-Jul-06/9:15 AM Reply
I thought he was just acting British and speaking of a Lord of an estate. The other way would just make it a silly distraction.
[8] Ranger 10-Jul-06/12:35 AM Reply
Decent concept, I can't argue with it. Strong rhythm and rhyme, well constructed. But I'd agree with Dovina...putting 'God' and 'sin' together will always make it seem like you're just out to have a go at Christianity - which ultimately detracts focus from the poem. How about:

Rosalina, surely
Spinning from
The ferris-wheel operator's
Untimely sinning
[8] ecargo 10-Jul-06/9:13 AM Reply
I'm not a big fan of abecedaria (unless it's an Edward Gorey abecedarium: http://www.wishville.co.uk/gorey/a.htm), but it's a fun exercise. Using "A" for _a_ and "the" for _t_ strikes me as cheating a little! ;) Considering you're writing to a formula, this is pretty unstilted and entertaining. Given Delilah, "The Lord," sinning, and zealots, the reference to Juliet (I'm not sure who rosalina is) seems out of place somehow.

Anyway, pretty good.
[10] ALChemy 12-Jul-06/9:10 AM Reply
Would have made Poe grin.