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An Affair with Letters (Acrostic) by MacFrantic

A moment Before she Came to me, Delilah, quite Entirely, was Found in Grips of sanity, Haunted by Impurities. Juliet was Kindly told, Lately, that her Mind was bold. Now her Overbearing hold Presses closely; Quiet, cold. Rosalina, surely Spinning from The Lord's Untimely sinning, Veils her Wares in Xylose, thinning Young again; a Zealot winning

ecargo 10-Jul-06/9:13 AM
I'm not a big fan of abecedaria (unless it's an Edward Gorey abecedarium: http://www.wishville.co.uk/gorey/a.htm), but it's a fun exercise. Using "A" for _a_ and "the" for _t_ strikes me as cheating a little! ;) Considering you're writing to a formula, this is pretty unstilted and entertaining. Given Delilah, "The Lord," sinning, and zealots, the reference to Juliet (I'm not sure who rosalina is) seems out of place somehow.

Anyway, pretty good.




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