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An Affair with Letters (Acrostic) by MacFrantic

A moment Before she Came to me, Delilah, quite Entirely, was Found in Grips of sanity, Haunted by Impurities. Juliet was Kindly told, Lately, that her Mind was bold. Now her Overbearing hold Presses closely; Quiet, cold. Rosalina, surely Spinning from The Lord's Untimely sinning, Veils her Wares in Xylose, thinning Young again; a Zealot winning

Ranger 10-Jul-06/12:35 AM
Decent concept, I can't argue with it. Strong rhythm and rhyme, well constructed. But I'd agree with Dovina...putting 'God' and 'sin' together will always make it seem like you're just out to have a go at Christianity - which ultimately detracts focus from the poem. How about:

Rosalina, surely
Spinning from
The ferris-wheel operator's
Untimely sinning




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