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Here's your God (Free verse) by Caducus >God is deaf
God is blind
and has cataracts
Silver and gold
From too much rest
God is the David sling
In goliath pastures
Where palestinian children
Dream of semtex
And israeli bus stops.
God belongs to Devils
They speak with texan tongue
Holler with Islamic foam
As people pray to his pseudonyms
Allah, Jesus, Hare Krishna.
God is the vomit of the grief stricken
God is the child of sanctions
God is the insurrection of ignorance
And God is just an excuse
Dangling in our consciences
Like blown off limbs of war
Up the ladder:
Like a Whore {erotic}
Down the ladder:
In My Words
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.5
Posted: August 1, 2006 5:32 AM PDT; Last modified: August 1, 2006 5:33 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.6723537 Overall Rank: 2056 Comments:
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Caducus @ 86.137.20.84
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1-Aug-06/5:33 AM
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rough draft
I think G-d would be proud of this poem.
Whoever will you have left to blame if everyone stops believing in God? Maybe then we'll blame the soccer fans.
too many people see their God for what it is not...
thanx Caducus for these new revelation.
Good stuff, especially: God is just an excuse...I really dig that. Very intense.
Do I smell rancor on the ranker? I know itâs poemranker, not poetranker, but itâs hard to be objective on this one. First the easy stuff: why the â>â and the double space before âJesusâ? Then the logical stuff, like how can cataracts be silver and gold? And the grammar stuff like, âIsraeli,â âPalestinianâ and âTexan.â But what intrigues me about this is the prayer of David, a man after Godâs own heart, who said, âStrike all my enemies in the jaw; break the teeth of the wicked.â Itâs taken a long time, maybe, and the answer isnât as expected, and it makes it look a whole lot like something else, but who knows the ways of God. Anyway, youâve well expressed an angst.
cataracts silver = moon gold = sun
constant blindness
Just good poetry...
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