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Here's your God (Free verse) by Caducus
>God is deaf God is blind and has cataracts Silver and gold From too much rest God is the David sling In goliath pastures Where palestinian children Dream of semtex And israeli bus stops. God belongs to Devils They speak with texan tongue Holler with Islamic foam As people pray to his pseudonyms Allah, Jesus, Hare Krishna. God is the vomit of the grief stricken God is the child of sanctions God is the insurrection of ignorance And God is just an excuse Dangling in our consciences Like blown off limbs of war

Up the ladder: Leg
Down the ladder: All About Mistakes

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.5
Weighted score: 5.6723537
Overall Rank: 2057
Posted: August 1, 2006 5:32 AM PDT; Last modified: August 1, 2006 5:33 AM PDT
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[n/a] Caducus @ 86.137.20.84 | 1-Aug-06/5:33 AM | Reply
rough draft
[8] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 | 1-Aug-06/5:45 AM | Reply
I think G-d would be proud of this poem.
[8] ALChemy @ 71.75.188.163 | 1-Aug-06/7:43 AM | Reply
Whoever will you have left to blame if everyone stops believing in God? Maybe then we'll blame the soccer fans.
[n/a] daggatolar @ 82.128.5.101 | 1-Aug-06/10:03 AM | Reply
too many people see their God for what it is not...
thanx Caducus for these new revelation.
[10] creepshow @ 70.58.232.205 | 1-Aug-06/10:24 AM | Reply
Good stuff, especially: God is just an excuse...I really dig that. Very intense.
[9] Dovina @ 12.72.37.50 | 1-Aug-06/12:52 PM | Reply
Do I smell rancor on the ranker? I know it’s poemranker, not poetranker, but it’s hard to be objective on this one. First the easy stuff: why the “>” and the double space before “Jesus”? Then the logical stuff, like how can cataracts be silver and gold? And the grammar stuff like, “Israeli,” “Palestinian” and “Texan.” But what intrigues me about this is the prayer of David, a man after God’s own heart, who said, “Strike all my enemies in the jaw; break the teeth of the wicked.” It’s taken a long time, maybe, and the answer isn’t as expected, and it makes it look a whole lot like something else, but who knows the ways of God. Anyway, you’ve well expressed an angst.
[n/a] Caducus @ 86.137.20.84 > Dovina | 2-Aug-06/1:22 AM | Reply
cataracts silver = moon gold = sun

constant blindness
[10] MacFrantic @ 71.208.112.134 | 2-Aug-06/8:40 PM | Reply
Just good poetry...
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