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Portrait of a King (Free verse) by MacFrantic
A rusted red mantle. Hello God. You are a vision, an eyesore, that poetic verse that goes the way of waste: fecal literature. You come at me with ruse, your condescending subterfuge. But you are less denouement and more of an afterthought. Your eyes engage living eyes. The carpets match your flaxen beard. Lights shadow likeness where caption's disservice do. Dull colors of your compunction show forever in your worried smile. Glorious hubris spills from your countenance to mine. You are king, and I, your canvas, and if I perish in the evening sun, how then I must become you: a withered child in the belly of a boar.

Up the ladder: it's wonderful
Down the ladder: Thoughts

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.9525743
Overall Rank: 8858
Posted: August 2, 2006 10:08 PM PDT; Last modified: August 3, 2006 10:59 AM PDT
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[8] Dovina @ 70.38.78.229 | 3-Aug-06/12:22 PM | Reply
So many images going on here! The first line leads us to God, the king, in a red mantle. The next three lines show the observer’s disgust with God, or with literature that falls as waste, or both. Verse 2 continues the diatribe or disgust. Verse 4 gets back to the “portrait” in the title, continuing the downward description. The last verse is the most intriguing, an interesting view of it.
[n/a] MacFrantic @ 172.194.169.205 > Dovina | 3-Aug-06/12:32 PM | Reply
This is actually less complicated then it seems. The title is accurate. The narrator is looking at the portrait of a king. The reference to God is sarcastic.
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