replying on Drug Addict by SupremeDreamer
20 Oct 2003, 1:19 PM
what has become of post 11538?
on Drug Addict by SupremeDreamer
20 Oct 2003, 1:10 PM
"rotting time"
"hollow stone"
"eternal view"
"insomniatic dreams"
I could do with one less "warm" in the last stanza.
"hollow stone"
"eternal view"
"insomniatic dreams"
I could do with one less "warm" in the last stanza.
on what i thought i was thinking by FreeFormFixation
20 Oct 2003, 12:52 PM
a flash of inspiration.
replying on You'd sell more hats, mugs, and shirts if they said... by Shardik
19 Oct 2003, 2:59 PM
I am, then, honored to be in the company of royalty. You'll forgive me, though, if I don't read it again - the first was already a waste of my time.
on You'd sell more hats, mugs, and shirts if they said... by Shardik
19 Oct 2003, 2:45 PM
who is James - who are you, and why do I have to read about either of you??
"bequeeth" is "ea", but I think you meant "beseech", unless you were saying it as he might, presumably as wrongly as you? No idea.
to eath his own.
"bequeeth" is "ea", but I think you meant "beseech", unless you were saying it as he might, presumably as wrongly as you? No idea.
to eath his own.
on broken by GekoHawaii
19 Oct 2003, 7:18 AM
okay, I was tolerating the expression because the meter is perfect up to stanza three.
I think, too, btw that you've just barely straddled the comfortable side of unforced rhyme - so, not bad in that regard.
I think, too, btw that you've just barely straddled the comfortable side of unforced rhyme - so, not bad in that regard.
replying on September 11, 2001: That Day by blues361
18 Oct 2003, 4:45 PM
MAN, you totally crack me up. (seriously and without any malice or sarcasm)
on Sonnet or Limerick? by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
18 Oct 2003, 9:10 AM
SEE now that's a SONNET!
I knew you could do it.
I knew you could do it.
on two tunnels blip out by skaskowski
16 Oct 2003, 7:27 PM
I'll grant that it's probably clever - though it may sound more so than is so; I do, however, appreciate the unusual form.
The other two: sapphires; this - more muddy. I will admit, it can be fun to play in the mud.
The other two: sapphires; this - more muddy. I will admit, it can be fun to play in the mud.
on Tabula Rasa by skaskowski
16 Oct 2003, 7:24 PM
Writ with a confident, skilled hand that pulls words as concepts onto stacks with a geometric efficiency.
Once again, I have to work to understand what shape this equation takes - but I want to.
Once again, I have to work to understand what shape this equation takes - but I want to.
on paper fragments by skaskowski
16 Oct 2003, 7:18 PM
This is quite nice; flowing, roaming within an easy pattern.
Having said that, I'm gonna haveta read it a few more times to figure out what the hell it's about - but, you know what? - I look forward to it.
Having said that, I'm gonna haveta read it a few more times to figure out what the hell it's about - but, you know what? - I look forward to it.
replying on Blue Collar Beat by Big Daddy
16 Oct 2003, 5:38 PM
And I thought you were a stunningly good judge of character - maybe we were both right.
(besides, I was trying to be polite - dick. Don't say anything to big daddy - he scares me)
(besides, I was trying to be polite - dick. Don't say anything to big daddy - he scares me)
on Blue Collar Beat by Big Daddy
16 Oct 2003, 2:20 PM
fairly engaging.
and in interesting format.
and in interesting format.
on The first Poeme by Everyone by Everyone
16 Oct 2003, 2:15 PM
squishy
on Nudesflash by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
15 Oct 2003, 6:19 PM
Funny as hell; very clever!
my favorite: "*Nude thirds of all nudely-weds cannot afford to buy a nude home, a nude
survey reveals. “We’re thinking of emigrating to Nudefoundland,” say Mr
amd Mrs John Nude."
(it's still nude a God Damned sonnet...)
my favorite: "*Nude thirds of all nudely-weds cannot afford to buy a nude home, a nude
survey reveals. “We’re thinking of emigrating to Nudefoundland,” say Mr
amd Mrs John Nude."
(it's still nude a God Damned sonnet...)
on Kites, Gunpowder, and a Chair by Geschäftsreise
15 Oct 2003, 11:42 AM
most excerrent.
My mother started using it, and now her age spots have completely faded away!