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Free verse № 70483

Kites, Gunpowder, and a Chair

by Geschäftsreise

Member since 2003 · Posted 15 Oct 2003 · 14 comments

A parade of 100 servants, my children, And my excitement to be one of them! With a launch pad upon our backs we ourselves had carefully designed so much planning the right chair - not too soft or uncomfortable for such a long journey kites - to carry the wind and propel him forward and most important of all: 47 bamboo tubes filled with gunpowder and strapped to the chair 46 servants in addition to myself to set fire those tubes 45 seconds until we would all light our fuses sending Wan Hu into space - the first Chinese astronaut

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[8] <~> 15-Oct-03/10:44 AM Reply
not to be televised, live.
[8] <~> 15-Oct-03/10:45 AM Reply
one who?
[7] Shuushin 15-Oct-03/11:42 AM Reply
most excerrent.
[n/a] Geschäftsreise › Shuushin 15-Oct-03/12:33 PM Reply
www.engrish.com
[1] god'swife 15-Oct-03/12:09 PM Reply
Why do I keep believing I might actually find some poetry here?
[n/a] Geschäftsreise › god'swife 15-Oct-03/12:27 PM Reply
Enlighten me, effete marie.

What is this 'poetry' you seek and do not find? Is it passion? Is it shock to affect? Is it message to purpose? Is it a tongue carefully coiled around a tasty phrase?

Which of these things do I not possess in abundance and been ignored by you for having it - only to find you banging on my lone whimsy wall?
[n/a] Geschäftsreise › god'swife 15-Oct-03/12:31 PM Reply
Read my poem "Pauling in Disguise". You might enjoy it (being a person in search of poetry). Are you aware that this story is a true medieval Chinese legend?
[9] horus8 15-Oct-03/10:49 PM Reply
Damn fine with me. 9.
[9] horus8 15-Oct-03/10:49 PM Reply
Che Che Nie
[8] richa 16-Oct-03/7:28 AM Reply
Yep like it, especially the way the last line makes everything clear.

A little bit patronising and racist though.

[6] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? › richa 16-Oct-03/8:38 AM Reply
Today, "The Sun" had an article about this, although the main focus was the fact that they'd had to invent a space-Chinese-takaway, which he had eaten in orbit around the Earth.
[n/a] abecedarian › richa 16-Oct-03/10:31 AM Reply
It's interesting that you would see it as patronizing and racist (I didn't intend it that way). But you're not the only one to think that so there must be something to it.

Have you ever heard of the story about the guy who found a jet engine and strapped it to his El Camino and launched himself into the side of a mesa wall? I used to love telling that story and I always assumed the guy was the same color as I am.

I think this poem is more about how things get started, or to be succint, 'every great idea is ugly in its infancy'. I meant this as such a wide contrast to actually sending someone into space. It is a praise of the taikonauts, not a slam.
[10] ecargo › abecedarian 16-Oct-03/11:47 AM Reply
I like this a lot. I didn't think it was patronizing or racist, and I honestly don't see anything in this to suggest that it is. I think people are assuming that you're belittling the current Chinese space adventure, but obviously you're not. Even though I didn't know the legend of Wan Hu, I picked up on the intimation that this was based on legend, from the language, the storytelling voice, the fact that you named names, etc. Easy enough to find the original story; here's one telling: http://cnnstudentnews.cnn.com/2003/TECH/space/09/30/china.wanhu/
[n/a] http://mulberryfairy › abecedarian 27-Oct-03/4:08 PM Reply
Yeah, ugly in its infancy like Jules Verne's early (before his time) ideas of what space travel would look like, none too pretty those travellers would've been in their huge hollow cannonball(?)