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Kites, Gunpowder, and a Chair (Free verse) by Geschäftsreise

A parade of 100 servants, my children, And my excitement to be one of them! With a launch pad upon our backs we ourselves had carefully designed so much planning the right chair - not too soft or uncomfortable for such a long journey kites - to carry the wind and propel him forward and most important of all: 47 bamboo tubes filled with gunpowder and strapped to the chair 46 servants in addition to myself to set fire those tubes 45 seconds until we would all light our fuses sending Wan Hu into space - the first Chinese astronaut

ecargo 16-Oct-03/11:47 AM
I like this a lot. I didn't think it was patronizing or racist, and I honestly don't see anything in this to suggest that it is. I think people are assuming that you're belittling the current Chinese space adventure, but obviously you're not. Even though I didn't know the legend of Wan Hu, I picked up on the intimation that this was based on legend, from the language, the storytelling voice, the fact that you named names, etc. Easy enough to find the original story; here's one telling: http://cnnstudentnews.cnn.com/2003/TECH/space/09/30/china.wanhu/




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