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two tunnels blip out (Free verse) by skaskowski
once upon a time there was a paperclip and his name was cholera. Cholera spent hours every day trying to impress his secret crush, rabies the stapler. Rabies was big and beautiful, just like Cholera loved. Rabies had the ability to hook people up. She would introduce two of her friends and bigga-stamp them together with metal. Cholera loved this. Whenever he tried to hook people up he had to stay there the whole time and play he-said she-said games as they fought or were confused or were just goofing off. But when he had to leave, they seperated and hated each other. Cholera knew that he could never be what rabies needed. she had her own little pieces of metal at her disposal, he was just a bigger and less flexible version. He twisted himself into a wide array of forms, but she never even pretended to notice him. Little did he know that she really cared. And that all she wanted was somebody to sit beside her as everyone else left in little tiny pieces. or in pairs. he spent the rest of his life bent up and unable to regain his original form. she spent the rest of her life giving herself away fragment by fragment.

Up the ladder: The Flower
Down the ladder: Dreamtime

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.5
Weighted score: 4.9403987
Overall Rank: 9078
Posted: October 16, 2003 4:35 PM PDT; Last modified: October 16, 2003 4:35 PM PDT
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[7] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 16-Oct-03/7:27 PM | Reply
I'll grant that it's probably clever - though it may sound more so than is so; I do, however, appreciate the unusual form.

The other two: sapphires; this - more muddy. I will admit, it can be fun to play in the mud.
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