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Decay (Free verse) by INTRANSIT Castle gate rusts
as it guards the womb.
Rusty Hull-ed ship
carries disease
Rusty shopping cart
beggar on his knees
Rusting old car
road trippin' road trippin'
Rusty old car
clutch is a slippin'
Rust
Rust
Rust
Quiet rust
The dollar bill chatters
in god we trust
The steeple of the church
drips its' rusting chips
The rusty Iron gate
Guards the entrance to the tomb.
Up the ladder:
Some die waiting, or laugh forgetting
Down the ladder:
Chickens
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Posted: October 20, 2003 6:25 AM PDT; Last modified: October 20, 2003 6:25 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.958069 Overall Rank: 146 Comments:
Very sexual; made me think of a chastity belt.
and with an excellent cadence.
Might I suggest a collapsing parking structure and a legless prostitute in a rusting radio flyer?
Beat us over the head. Go ahead. Beat us.
I know I'm a bane in the neck. Once I have "tooled up" a little better and gotten through some personal stuff, I will write better poetry. I assure you that hanging around the fives, while a great group as it is, is not my goal. I'm still learning patience. I ask nothing else from you.
i absolutely love this! i honestly have no idea why but i sense a brilliance in it! - 10 -
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carries disease
Rusty shopping cart
beggar on his knees"
You may omit the rest.