Re: Awefucked by a Shushin Shitzu (freefuck) by <{Baba^Yaga}>	7-Nov-03/9:01 PM
I am honored, truly honored. [wipes eye, ass; flushes]
Re: a comment on Marrowless highway by INTRANSIT	6-Nov-03/7:04 PM
OH! the Vibe, damn - good one. And Crossfire too (I missed that the first time) - wait - where is the vibe? ACT2600 is the clutch. And yep on the MSD (MSD DIS-2). And here's another for you (install to finish this weekend, hopefully) ZEX... ;O)
Re: Marrowless highway by INTRANSIT	6-Nov-03/6:52 PM
I get it - CARachters; a coinage! a blown radiator - is one car heaped onto another? car clues: [mercury] sable, [plymouth] voyager, [i forgot, honda?] Escape? hemi as partial - cute. here are some car cues of mine: 16G,1G BOV,2600ACT,AFC,MSD - is that enough to guess what it is?
Re: Sorry by tori	6-Nov-03/6:44 PM
A difficult road - and a very nice expression of it.
Re: Thoughts by tori	6-Nov-03/6:32 PM
typo: Don't let i[t] go damn! I forgot what I wuz gonna type.
Re: BREATH by ShaNoN+960317485	6-Nov-03/8:48 AM
greets ShabigNlittleOHbigN A clever riddle, pleasantly done. Didja mean to leave the "e" off of hast[e]? Hard to tell with the dialect.
Re: God bless your stool plop by <{Baba^Yaga}>	6-Nov-03/8:35 AM
I'm sorry, this is crap. In all your personalities you show a gift for fresh perspective - and that comes easily to you. But this putting it into a readable form thing; harder, eh? - when you find that the poem just drops out of you, instead of just posting the shit - how about spending a little time to form it into something presentable? Maybe then you won't need nine avatars to carry things to the screen. The shock of the stink only carries you so far (or I've just gotten used to it).
Re: A Truth About Mortals by Caducus	6-Nov-03/8:26 AM
Some really good concepts, like the boxed russian dolls, manufacturing linked with Taiwanese children, sardines brined from stress (sweaty sweaty) - but I think the thing could use a diet, and the meaning wanders a bit, imho (as usual). for example, the word truth is there a few times too many maybe. Given what is here, ask yourself, again, what point(s) your are trying to make, and make a stab at refocusing it. You may find you have enough trimmings for another poem. As a final thought - consider changing it to a third person. I know, I know - your poem conveys a personal message of self-definition - but I think you can do that, and hold the readers sympathies better if there is a character involved.
Re: i love this shit by Yatasuma	5-Nov-03/12:35 PM
LoL - very funny. five seven then five do you need an abacus? I counted this thrice.
Re: I AM THE BEST by ____________________	5-Nov-03/12:09 PM
oh god. My head hurts. Three stanzas and I would have liked it just fine - I might have even repeated it to *myself* a hundred times after - cuz it's catchy. Now I just want to take a pill and hope it goes away.
Re: The hypocrisy of calling it tolerance by impert&ent	4-Nov-03/7:27 PM
yeah, what TP said.
Re: a comment on The dog that loved a chicken by <{Baba^Yaga}>	4-Nov-03/7:24 PM
AND not his mother The Third Isis
Re: a comment on The dog that loved a chicken by <{Baba^Yaga}>	4-Nov-03/7:23 PM
AND Jeremi B Handrinos
Re: a comment on The dog that loved a chicken by <{Baba^Yaga}>	4-Nov-03/7:22 PM
AND Bachus
Re: a comment on The dog that loved a chicken by <{Baba^Yaga}>	4-Nov-03/7:21 PM
AND shardik
Re: My Secret by ThoughtfulSoul	4-Nov-03/12:30 PM
so sweet - and so sad. I wonder about the "unique body" . . . I'd typically crit for the simple descriptors (doesn't show much, tells alot) - but they fit with the simple emotional theme, so; fine. This would easily make a very nice ghazal.
Re: vampirism extrapolated by FreeFormFixation	4-Nov-03/8:23 AM
I just did in an excercise in my programming class where I had the students write a program that by simulating a vampire needing to feed everynight, and thereby converting another human into vampire - how long would it take to convert all the humans into vampires. Turns out it takes just about a month to convert 6 billion people. one of the "proofs" that vampires don't exist - but it makes a few arbitrary (and silly) assumptions. as for the poem here - I feel like I need to munch on it more, but I do so hesitantly because there isn't much room for interpretation (not quite getting it). I do like some of the bits in it: "neck knives red drops stained scarf" is cool.
Re: advice by ThePariahDog	4-Nov-03/8:15 AM
it does have a bigger than life feel - and I'm gonna disagree with the dear with headlights; it is quite poetic (what isn't? Sounds like attitude to me). I don't really get the bit about taking an adequate wife though - unconvincing our vague, somehow.
Re: Nocturnal Emissions by EAger to Offend	3-Nov-03/6:25 PM
i think loose "-the city" and put a suitable modifier on "compost" (like "urban" or sumfin'). other than that, and the contradiction between being eager to offend and pursuing a hindu or buddhist way - not to shabby. Massive points for the flowing "home-made mandala Wallpaper"
Re: A Fistful of Haiku for All Ages by HaikuMofo	3-Nov-03/6:04 PM
Very nice - Dennis Leary would be proud, you HWMF. Kill Bill roxors.