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BREATH (Free verse) by ShaNoN+960317485 In sleep or in wake, in slumber or in hast
What can thee not hold for ye dear life?
Adolescence to come of age, to time till death
What must be that ye never give but ever take?
Come shallow while some come deep
Why âart they both a concern for ye to keep?
In cold it makes smoke but none in heat
What so dear is it that it ye must for ever try keep?
Up the ladder:
blue lilac and I (edit)
Down the ladder:
A Tragic Love Tryst In The Park Near The Sewage Works
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.869565
Posted: November 4, 2003 9:24 PM PST; Last modified: November 4, 2003 9:24 PM PSTWeighted score: 6.835939 Overall Rank: 330 Comments:
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ShaNoN+960317485 @ 199.40.206.3
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4-Nov-03/9:28 PM
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For my dear BREATH:o)
greets ShabigNlittleOHbigN
A clever riddle, pleasantly done. Didja mean to leave the "e" off of hast[e]? Hard to tell with the dialect.
Thanx but 'whats there in a name' - long or short, wound or horned the guy in ref is, if he is:o)
I'm guessing that means, "yes" (you meant to leave it off)
the 'e' kinda makes it odd... thats what i feel so thats how i kept it:o)
Cool one
Too many es for my taste
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