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Nocturnal Emissions

Member since 2003 · Posted 3 Nov 2003 · 5 comments

Ruined by the mundane day By itâs âwake, work, and get paidâ By the blasÃ© art of commerce A sterile compost -the city. Starving for solitude In the darkest a.m. panic These eyes stay wide To deny the nightmare congestion Imprinted under-lid. Eager to offend I lick my plate And meditate On my home-made mandala Wallpaper.

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[8] Shuushin 3-Nov-03/6:25 PM Reply

i think loose "-the city" and put a suitable modifier on "compost" (like "urban" or sumfin').

other than that, and the contradiction between being eager to offend and pursuing a hindu or buddhist way - not to shabby.

Massive points for the flowing "home-made mandala
Wallpaper"

[8] Patsy 3-Nov-03/10:15 PM Reply

"I lick my plate
And meditate" won me over.

[9] <{Baba^Yaga}> 4-Nov-03/2:48 AM Reply

Queerly, true.

[5] smlink84 29-Feb-04/6:19 PM Reply

although the illustrations are very interesting, I lost you at the last paragraph...but then again maybe I didn't...haha..

[5] Edna Sweetlove 21-Jun-06/3:42 AM Reply

Pretty dreary this one.