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Nocturnal Emissions (Free verse) by EAger to Offend

Ruined by the mundane day By it’s “wake, work, and get paid” By the blasé art of commerce A sterile compost -the city. Starving for solitude In the darkest a.m. panic These eyes stay wide To deny the nightmare congestion Imprinted under-lid. Eager to offend I lick my plate And meditate On my home-made mandala Wallpaper.

Shuushin 3-Nov-03/6:25 PM
i think loose "-the city" and put a suitable modifier on "compost" (like "urban" or sumfin').

other than that, and the contradiction between being eager to offend and pursuing a hindu or buddhist way - not to shabby.

Massive points for the flowing "home-made mandala
Wallpaper"




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