Re: Mental Escape by validus_vox	24-Apr-04/3:26 PM
So much text to wade through; lots of telling, no line breaks... Let the words do some of the work (give us both a break). I'm afraid I must too sound harsh.
Re: He Hunts For Meaning by validus_vox	24-Apr-04/3:23 PM
A preamble. To what?
Re: Writing the Books by validus_vox	24-Apr-04/3:21 PM
Some line breaks might help this.
Re: The Dead Sea by philn	24-Apr-04/3:18 PM
First two stanzas quite lovely and precisely made. The last does not work for me. I really hope you are able to bring it full circle somehow.
Re: a comment on You by Fire_is_cool	24-Apr-04/10:44 AM
I don't know why pasting the link in won't work, but I just do the last five chars.
Re: a comment on You by Fire_is_cool	24-Apr-04/10:43 AM
found it - it was actually in my favorites list. http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=20331
Re: a comment on You by Fire_is_cool	24-Apr-04/10:42 AM
crap - I hope he dinna delete it!
Re: You by Fire_is_cool	24-Apr-04/10:37 AM
Makes me wonder who begat pain and/of suffering if death begat this child described (or, as you say - you). Are your friends pain and suffering?
Re: a comment on You by Fire_is_cool	24-Apr-04/10:32 AM
I canna find this one.
Re: a comment on Of Dreams and Obscurity by wilco	24-Apr-04/10:22 AM
Sure, I'll buy that. Thanks.
Re: untitled by minty	24-Apr-04/10:17 AM
Ack. Hey - not bad for a poem of this type; one of the better ones.
Re: Words that the Earth has to say… by nothingtoanyone	24-Apr-04/10:12 AM
"to[o] late"
Re: Sold by Jeremi B. Handrinos	24-Apr-04/10:10 AM
Nice.
Re: a comment on The How To on Haikus by <Wankster>	23-Apr-04/8:45 PM
is you wankster too?
Re: a comment on The Negro by Everyone	23-Apr-04/8:40 PM
its more of a "bending over" to the right.
Re: a comment on The Negro by Everyone	23-Apr-04/8:39 PM
curried monkey brains would be better.
Re: a comment on The How To on Haikus by <Wankster>	23-Apr-04/8:36 PM
Same one Nentwined was talking about: "you've mastered the haiku poem" 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 unless someone wants to convince me "poem" is one syllable.
Re: jammin in the basement by xunitedx	23-Apr-04/8:31 PM
AABBCC... rhyming is maddening - it really is.
Re: Deceiving by Ice	23-Apr-04/8:29 PM
I do like the idea of adding some sound effects, etc. - but not enough of it here to realize that idea. This is just so classic a pimple - the one word I come to is "endearing". But this subject has been so done. and done.
Re: Chronic Depression by Ice	23-Apr-04/8:24 PM
A good exercise - writing this stuff will help you to write the things people want to read.