on Humidity by Lifeboatman
23 Apr 2004, 8:18 PM
is there a missing word in the next to last line?
on Of Dreams and Obscurity by wilco
23 Apr 2004, 8:16 PM
I can't imagine anyone too tall to leap.
How does that work?
How does that work?
on The How To on Haikus by <Wankster>
23 Apr 2004, 7:09 PM
I'm giving you a seven in the hopes that the 8 syllable line was intentional.
Cuz, well - that would be funny.
Cuz, well - that would be funny.
on When feeling has been lost... by philn
23 Apr 2004, 7:02 PM
second stanza has some fresher language in it, but somehow its like spending a day with grandma and getting a half dollar on the way out.
on factor me out by fluffigrbl11
23 Apr 2004, 6:58 PM
eenteresting...
You got a ten already? Count me in.
You got a ten already? Count me in.
replying on Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac
23 Apr 2004, 10:37 AM
Obviously, as I said.
replying on Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac
23 Apr 2004, 9:00 AM
Interesting phrase "take place"
"life is a thing in which games take place"
"take place" as "occur", "manifest", "become; become apparent" - it all feels redundant. Games as a thing defined, as having a label and used by language - already exist.
"life is a thing in which games occur(...)" could be:
"life is a thing with games"
Yet, life as a thing has lots of things, in fact, it could be argued that it contains all things (including nothing) - not just games.
So really, it is meaningless to claim it has games. Life has belly-button lint too, but do we really need to state it?
"Life is a thing"
But really, we know life to encompass more than just things, it also contains the set of no-things.
"Life is"
Yet, sometimes it isn't - is that true also? Seriously - if life can contain the thing "no-thing" can it also contain the thing "non life"? And by doing so, does it negate its own existance?
Or rather, does it make it's definition meaningless - or at best - fruitless?
I offer the previous ruminations as proof that defining life is fruitless. As fruitless, at least, as wondering if Foucault would have had nearly the fame he enjoys if he wore a toupee and contacts.
"life is a thing in which games take place"
"take place" as "occur", "manifest", "become; become apparent" - it all feels redundant. Games as a thing defined, as having a label and used by language - already exist.
"life is a thing in which games occur(...)" could be:
"life is a thing with games"
Yet, life as a thing has lots of things, in fact, it could be argued that it contains all things (including nothing) - not just games.
So really, it is meaningless to claim it has games. Life has belly-button lint too, but do we really need to state it?
"Life is a thing"
But really, we know life to encompass more than just things, it also contains the set of no-things.
"Life is"
Yet, sometimes it isn't - is that true also? Seriously - if life can contain the thing "no-thing" can it also contain the thing "non life"? And by doing so, does it negate its own existance?
Or rather, does it make it's definition meaningless - or at best - fruitless?
I offer the previous ruminations as proof that defining life is fruitless. As fruitless, at least, as wondering if Foucault would have had nearly the fame he enjoys if he wore a toupee and contacts.
replying on do androids dream? by nentwined
22 Apr 2004, 8:35 AM
:[clang]:
replying on Bob Jones Walked the Biscuits by Modulo
22 Apr 2004, 8:23 AM
And you missed mine - your data collection technique is flawed. You fail.
on Bob Jones Walked the Biscuits by Modulo
22 Apr 2004, 8:22 AM
SEE - now thats a finish. Nicely done.
replying on Bob Jones Walked the Biscuits by Modulo
22 Apr 2004, 8:21 AM
No, its not. Don't be a dork.
replying on do androids dream? by nentwined
22 Apr 2004, 8:19 AM
Amen to that. Brother.
replying on do androids dream? by nentwined
22 Apr 2004, 7:33 AM
I just posted a sister poem on this topic.
on Quintus: Lesson 1 by richa
22 Apr 2004, 7:02 AM
Tasty. Tasty like delicous little fishes.
on do androids dream? by nentwined
22 Apr 2004, 6:59 AM
yes Rachel, they dream of electric sheep.
A nicely encapsulated thought - and it rhymes; it must be true.
A nicely encapsulated thought - and it rhymes; it must be true.
replying on In Gold Leaf by bearhead
22 Apr 2004, 3:51 AM
And my favorite: "The last Christian died on the cross"
Thanks
Thanks
on Biography I (1996) by halofriendly
21 Apr 2004, 5:54 PM
the ending could have been very special I think, after such an engaging start.
Something needs to happen there, after the "but..." (even if you have to make it up)
and please - no talk of suicide; rather some event, or perhaps a statement of altered awareness, a re-union, somehting.
Something needs to happen there, after the "but..." (even if you have to make it up)
and please - no talk of suicide; rather some event, or perhaps a statement of altered awareness, a re-union, somehting.
on perfection show by halofriendly
21 Apr 2004, 5:45 PM
has a very sweet, if cryptic, feel.
I'd like to see it formatted slightly different, but the content is fine.
I'd like to see it formatted slightly different, but the content is fine.
It is difficult to take such a thing seriously when it rhymes too conveniently.
The only examples I can think of involve war.