Re: Radiation Reflections by sarah	23-Apr-04/8:22 PM
I think your search for alliteration and rhyme put a slight, likely unintentional, comedic twist to the thing. It is difficult to take such a thing seriously when it rhymes too conveniently. The only examples I can think of involve war.
Re: Humidity by Lifeboatman	23-Apr-04/8:18 PM
is there a missing word in the next to last line?
Re: Of Dreams and Obscurity by wilco	23-Apr-04/8:16 PM
I can't imagine anyone too tall to leap. How does that work?
Re: The How To on Haikus by <Wankster>	23-Apr-04/7:09 PM
I'm giving you a seven in the hopes that the 8 syllable line was intentional. Cuz, well - that would be funny.
Re: When feeling has been lost... by philn	23-Apr-04/7:02 PM
second stanza has some fresher language in it, but somehow its like spending a day with grandma and getting a half dollar on the way out.
Re: factor me out by fluffigrbl11	23-Apr-04/6:58 PM
eenteresting... You got a ten already? Count me in.
Re: a comment on Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac	23-Apr-04/10:37 AM
Obviously, as I said.
Re: a comment on Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac	23-Apr-04/9:00 AM
Interesting phrase "take place" "life is a thing in which games take place" "take place" as "occur", "manifest", "become; become apparent" - it all feels redundant. Games as a thing defined, as having a label and used by language - already exist. "life is a thing in which games occur(...)" could be: "life is a thing with games" Yet, life as a thing has lots of things, in fact, it could be argued that it contains all things (including nothing) - not just games. So really, it is meaningless to claim it has games. Life has belly-button lint too, but do we really need to state it? "Life is a thing" But really, we know life to encompass more than just things, it also contains the set of no-things. "Life is" Yet, sometimes it isn't - is that true also? Seriously - if life can contain the thing "no-thing" can it also contain the thing "non life"? And by doing so, does it negate its own existance? Or rather, does it make it's definition meaningless - or at best - fruitless? I offer the previous ruminations as proof that defining life is fruitless. As fruitless, at least, as wondering if Foucault would have had nearly the fame he enjoys if he wore a toupee and contacts.
Re: a comment on do androids dream? by nentwined	22-Apr-04/8:35 AM
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Re: a comment on Bob Jones Walked the Biscuits by Modulo	22-Apr-04/8:23 AM
And you missed mine - your data collection technique is flawed. You fail.
Re: Bob Jones Walked the Biscuits by Modulo	22-Apr-04/8:22 AM
SEE - now thats a finish. Nicely done.
Re: a comment on Bob Jones Walked the Biscuits by Modulo	22-Apr-04/8:21 AM
No, its not. Don't be a dork.
Re: a comment on do androids dream? by nentwined	22-Apr-04/8:19 AM
Amen to that. Brother.
Re: a comment on eva by samgon	22-Apr-04/7:36 AM
I want a brail shirt that says "You're Making Me Horny"
Re: a comment on do androids dream? by nentwined	22-Apr-04/7:33 AM
I just posted a sister poem on this topic.
Re: Quintus: Lesson 1 by richa	22-Apr-04/7:02 AM
Tasty. Tasty like delicous little fishes.
Re: do androids dream? by nentwined	22-Apr-04/6:59 AM
yes Rachel, they dream of electric sheep. A nicely encapsulated thought - and it rhymes; it must be true.
Re: a comment on In Gold Leaf by bearhead	22-Apr-04/3:51 AM
And my favorite: "The last Christian died on the cross" Thanks
Re: Biography I (1996) by halofriendly	21-Apr-04/5:54 PM
the ending could have been very special I think, after such an engaging start. Something needs to happen there, after the "but..." (even if you have to make it up) and please - no talk of suicide; rather some event, or perhaps a statement of altered awareness, a re-union, somehting.
Re: perfection show by halofriendly	21-Apr-04/5:45 PM
has a very sweet, if cryptic, feel. I'd like to see it formatted slightly different, but the content is fine.