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Free verse № 98496

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Member since 2004 · Posted 24 Apr 2004 · 2 comments

Behind my mask i hide my tears, my swollen eyes beneath show fear, it drowns my lips because of what you said, look where the pain you brought me led. How many times have i kneeled before you, or how i used to do what you want me to? However many times i became too foolish, to keep thinking that without you i will banish. And now, here alone i stand, for i always believed i have your hand, now im here surviving without you, with only my mask as i hide what's true. Behind my mask i hide, because of fear to swallow my pride. Behind my mask i'm drowend with tears, that you brought through all these years. Thus you made me a lot stronger, you made me realize to love myself better. Not because im now alone, but from our experiences in which we've grown. Although you've hurt me more than enough, i have been strong, don't i look tough? And now that we are bidding our goodbyes, i promise these tears won't last long in my eyes.

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[8] Shuushin 24-Apr-04/10:17 AM Reply
Ack.

Hey - not bad for a poem of this type; one of the better ones.
[7] deleted user 24-Apr-04/10:58 AM Reply
A good theme, but could be said in half as many words, or at least more interestingly.