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The Dead Sea (Free verse) by philn
The fading lamplight glimmers
With a flicker of surprise
As I turn it low to rest the dazzle
In these sleepless eyes
For everytime I let it burn
It burns away this skin
Hiding from the unforgiving world
The blackened heart within
Now strolling through the darkest forest
Looking towards the skies
And there descending from the clouds
Bright wings and azure eyes
Come horsemen cloaked in deepest red
So silent and surreal
Oh, how I longed for eyes that see
And skin that still could feel
And though surrounded by thousands of liars
Who sing soothing songs from the river of fire
Even the dark has stars to guide it home
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Weighted score: 5.4610424
Overall Rank: 2889
Posted: April 24, 2004 2:56 PM PDT; Last modified: April 24, 2004 2:56 PM PDT
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The last does not work for me. I really hope you are able to bring it full circle somehow.