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The Dead Sea (Free verse) by philn

The fading lamplight glimmers With a flicker of surprise As I turn it low to rest the dazzle In these sleepless eyes For everytime I let it burn It burns away this skin Hiding from the unforgiving world The blackened heart within Now strolling through the darkest forest Looking towards the skies And there descending from the clouds Bright wings and azure eyes Come horsemen cloaked in deepest red So silent and surreal Oh, how I longed for eyes that see And skin that still could feel And though surrounded by thousands of liars Who sing soothing songs from the river of fire Even the dark has stars to guide it home

philn 24-Apr-04/6:27 PM
I wasn't really sure how to end it, so that's why the third stanza doesn't really work right now. I wanted to see what people thought before I spent the time finishing it off and changing the ending.




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