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You (Free verse) by Fire_is_cool
When I think, Of you, I lose control, My life is gone, Everything around me, Is spinning, My heart feels free, I feel like flying, You may not, Think this, Is true, Just keep in mind, I will always, Love you.

Up the ladder: Unwanted
Down the ladder: The Crucible

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Arithmetic Mean: 1.25
Weighted score: 4.552989
Overall Rank: 12673
Posted: April 22, 2004 3:44 PM PDT; Last modified: October 25, 2004 8:49 AM PDT
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[n/a] deleted user @ 68.66.196.168 | 22-Apr-04/4:11 PM | Reply
Do you mean "daughter of Satan himself"? Sorry, don't get it.
[9] capachijim @ 24.168.25.13 | 22-Apr-04/4:36 PM | Reply
Ominous
[n/a] zodiac @ 67.240.155.57 | 22-Apr-04/5:38 PM | Reply
This reminds me of another recent post about the child of death:
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=20331
[n/a] zodiac @ 67.240.192.135 > zodiac | 24-Apr-04/6:43 AM | Reply
"Child of death" is not the same person as "daughter of satan himself". Satan's daughter is Sin, born fully formed out of his head the moment he began to conspire against Jesus. Satan raped Sin to produce Death, who upon being born immediately raped her as well, begetting all kinds of foul creatures. (PL 1:629-1055)
[7] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 > zodiac | 24-Apr-04/10:32 AM | Reply
I canna find this one.
[n/a] zodiac @ 67.240.155.220 > Shuushin | 24-Apr-04/10:38 AM | Reply
It's "Child of My Buttocks" by -=Dark_Angel=-.
[7] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 > zodiac | 24-Apr-04/10:42 AM | Reply
crap - I hope he dinna delete it!
[7] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 > Shuushin | 24-Apr-04/10:43 AM | Reply
found it - it was actually in my favorites list.

http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=20331
[7] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 > Shuushin | 24-Apr-04/10:44 AM | Reply
I don't know why pasting the link in won't work, but I just do the last five chars.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.154.19.210 > Shuushin | 26-Oct-04/12:14 PM | Reply
A gentleman would have used http://tinyurl.com
[7] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 24-Apr-04/10:37 AM | Reply
Makes me wonder who begat pain and/of suffering if death begat this child described (or, as you say - you).

Are your friends pain and suffering?
[5] Dovina @ 24.52.156.155 | 19-Oct-04/9:45 AM | Reply
The daughter is her daughter's child. On it goes. Well done.
[5] Dovina @ 24.52.156.155 | 25-Oct-04/1:59 PM | Reply
If you want to post a new poem, please do so. But when you pose a new poem as a revision of an old poem, the old comments look crazy.
[0] Edna Sweetlove @ 81.178.70.5 | 13-Aug-06/5:57 PM | Reply
A comma too far.
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