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Member since 2004 · Posted 22 Apr 2004 · Edited 25 Oct 2004 · 14 comments

When I think, Of you, I lose control, My life is gone, Everything around me, Is spinning, My heart feels free, I feel like flying, You may not, Think this, Is true, Just keep in mind, I will always, Love you.

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[n/a] deleted user 22-Apr-04/4:11 PM Reply

Do you mean "daughter of Satan himself"? Sorry, don't get it.

[9] capachijim 22-Apr-04/4:36 PM Reply

Ominous

[n/a] zodiac 22-Apr-04/5:38 PM Reply

This reminds me of another recent post about the child of death:
http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=20331

[n/a] zodiac › zodiac 24-Apr-04/6:43 AM Reply

"Child of death" is not the same person as "daughter of satan himself". Satan's daughter is Sin, born fully formed out of his head the moment he began to conspire against Jesus. Satan raped Sin to produce Death, who upon being born immediately raped her as well, begetting all kinds of foul creatures. (PL 1:629-1055)

[7] Shuushin › zodiac 24-Apr-04/10:32 AM Reply

I canna find this one.

[n/a] zodiac › Shuushin 24-Apr-04/10:38 AM Reply

It's "Child of My Buttocks" by -=Dark_Angel=-.

[7] Shuushin › zodiac 24-Apr-04/10:42 AM Reply

crap - I hope he dinna delete it!

[7] Shuushin › Shuushin 24-Apr-04/10:43 AM Reply

found it - it was actually in my favorites list.

http://www.poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=20331

[7] Shuushin › Shuushin 24-Apr-04/10:44 AM Reply

I don't know why pasting the link in won't work, but I just do the last five chars.

[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › Shuushin 26-Oct-04/12:14 PM Reply

A gentleman would have used http://tinyurl.com

[7] Shuushin 24-Apr-04/10:37 AM Reply

Makes me wonder who begat pain and/of suffering if death begat this child described (or, as you say - you).

Are your friends pain and suffering?

[5] Dovina 19-Oct-04/9:45 AM Reply

The daughter is her daughter's child. On it goes. Well done.

[5] Dovina 25-Oct-04/1:59 PM Reply

If you want to post a new poem, please do so. But when you pose a new poem as a revision of an old poem, the old comments look crazy.

[0] Edna Sweetlove 13-Aug-06/5:57 PM Reply

A comma too far.