regarding some deleted poem...	9-Oct-03/5:57 PM
I'm sorry this might sound severe: The moon *IS* the tide. "on" foot "Water runs where dug deep" - consider "waters runs deeply where dug" - oh christ, I don't know - something. this is cute: "enough to baptise every man and a little left over to drink, wash and spit" "and apple peels hang noses like a history" is interesting as hell - but I am clueless. and enough with the similies! You use them like a goat herder uses vaseline. Wow, I guess that wasn't so bad, was it?
Re: B.F. by skaskowski	9-Oct-03/6:08 PM
These two lines are stunning, perhaps in a comedic way: "Be a lapel on my chest to stand as a stapled reminder [.] [o]f what i've tried to digress to, but never lived up to. Never was able to." btw - the use of "digress" here sounds like a thesaurus as work - "turn", "aspire"?
Re: autumn angst by skaskowski	9-Oct-03/7:59 PM
A prepositional phrase slugfest. I think Kansas said it best with, "we are merely indifferent scraps of ignorance, all we are is indifferent scraps of ignorance ..." Consider a ";" after "wind" ("therefore" usage, actually, all of your commas here could be semi's) - keep or toss (as usual).
Re: Working man lament by Garrett S Sexton	9-Oct-03/8:03 PM
Simply put and to very good effect; I like it. I like it alot. Just a hint of an ars poetical self depreciation too - I said I liked this already, right? Is damn good. 8 from the East German.
Re: soulmates by casey	9-Oct-03/8:17 PM
A host of truisms with a greeting card feel - what can be wrong about that? small nit/typo: "your" in L6 s/b "you're"
Re: Screw u all! by Blade	10-Oct-03/3:37 AM
I haven't seen any of your others, but this one isn't too bad, but there's one extra syllable in the first line. and it's more senryu than haiku (gesundheit).
Re: sex sex sex! by FreeFormFixation	10-Oct-03/6:01 AM
The only better title I can think of is "beer, beer, beer" (j/k). Another really nice bit of work. Cool format - it suits the piece.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Oct-03/6:25 AM
Well, it has a shock factor. By L8 I was fairly medicated then WACK. Having said that - it seems like a sucker punch. From a sociopolitical viewpoint I really expected the child molestation angle as soon as I read the title, I just got lulled into thinking it was about something else. Sneaky little hobitses.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Oct-03/10:51 AM
Nice, in particular, the leaves as a fuse; great thought. Lots of biblical references. Richa, I don't know your work well enough to judge if it was intentional, but the dual medusa reference in relation to a shining apple tree is extremely good (as a jellyfish, or bell shape) - even if it was subconscious it's worthy of high kudos (the other reference with the many headed snakes is also good, but better if the heads are red). small nit/typo: "gleans" s/b "gleams" I like the "corn-cradle deep" without completely understanding it - can you help me with what it means?
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Oct-03/12:24 PM
Kippers in bits. A tastey piece, did you misspell Yom Kippur on purpose? I should also point out - since the holiday is like a day of attonement, there isn't much eating, let alone a feast going on (unless you are under the age of nine, or pregnant). Maybe you should pick another holiday to blow up.
Re: Magnets & Cross-Eyed Children by Bachus	11-Oct-03/5:18 AM
Puts the physics back in metaphysical - I really like the sounds made by "you will never deserve" ... / "of farulous verve"
Re: NUMERO UNO by gorbichoff	11-Oct-03/5:19 AM
"I'm just a cracka flowin', not really knowin'," YOU SHALL HAVE YOUR BIG ONE ZERO!
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Oct-03/5:21 AM
I think he had a code in his dose. He was telling you to keep it in your genes.
Re: For W. by A. Nomaly	11-Oct-03/5:23 AM
woah.
Re: "I know what you need!" by A. Nomaly	11-Oct-03/5:25 AM
no.... no - NOT THE SWANS!
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Oct-03/5:28 AM
Hey - I like this. Fortunately I didn't read your disclaimer until afterward, it might have given away the surprise. Nice work.
Re: My Angel's Suicide by Artemis745	11-Oct-03/5:32 AM
"In perfect position." Everything about angels is perfection - glad you had that word there. I didn't notice the repetition with "the gun" as I read it, which is cool.
Re: Silent Tears by Artemis745	11-Oct-03/5:34 AM
I think this would be particularly good as a character outline - I feel a story coming on.
Re: Die by Artemis745	11-Oct-03/5:37 AM
... and not a drop to drink. I like it - I would like it more if the word "almost" killed itself. maybe replace it with another modifier. like "gentle", or sumfin.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Oct-03/5:40 AM
works for me.