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sex sex sex! (Free verse) by FreeFormFixation
Red-lipped and lovely, she wrapped herself around me. a breadbasket continental shelf shifted below as i struggled for Footing. Blue-lipped and lonely, i cringed as your fingers touched me. isolated on the ocean floor i withered below, and my bubbles were Bursting. White-lipped and lively, she strapped her legs around me. a rickety wooden floor creaked below and i begged for Mercy. Black-lipped and lewdly, i pine for you to soothe me. clawed eyes cauterized burned below. i blindly sang, I'm Empty.

Up the ladder: Love doggerel
Down the ladder: salvage

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.8333335
Weighted score: 4.9551764
Overall Rank: 8723
Posted: October 10, 2003 12:48 AM PDT; Last modified: October 10, 2003 12:48 AM PDT
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[9] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.51 | 10-Oct-03/6:01 AM | Reply
The only better title I can think of is "beer, beer, beer" (j/k).

Another really nice bit of work. Cool format - it suits the piece.
[n/a] Caducus @ 62.105.119.105 | 10-Oct-03/9:04 AM | Reply
if you add the word no between each of the words in the title you would have written a short poem about my life.
[9] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 10-Oct-03/1:34 PM | Reply
Some good poems today from you, congratulations. 9
[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.234.241 | 10-Oct-03/5:33 PM | Reply
Wow! I would never have guessed that someone would have experienced sex!
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