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Love doggerel (Free verse) by thavimatola Lyra is as slow to woo,
As halon is to fission.
But her kiss inspires you
As liquor does elision.
These attributes will make you do
The things she says you can't,
Like an erring worker who
Comes drunk to the nuclear plant.
Up the ladder:
Watching My Son Sleep.
Down the ladder:
sex sex sex!
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Posted: September 29, 2003 8:01 AM PDT; Last modified: September 29, 2003 8:01 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.9551764 Overall Rank: 8717 Comments:
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Caducus @ 62.105.119.105
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29-Sep-03/9:28 AM
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Don't get it? help !
I don't really get it either, but I like the reference to the drunkard working at the nuclear plant.
Cute.
Points of possible confusion: (1) Doggerel is bad verse. (2) halon doesn't fission easily; fission is a nuclear process. (3) elision is a technical word for slurring.
halon n. chem. any of various gaseous compounds of carbon, bromine and other halogens, used to extinguish fires.
What? a)Halons are compounds (molecules), fission is a nuclear process. b)The elements in these molecules have lower atomic numbers than iron, so they wouldn't spontaneously fission anyway (their nuclei have a lower mass than their component nucleons) I did just find out that "lyrate" is a word meaning "lyre shaped" though, which is pretty excellent.
(1) Halon is generally understood to be deadening and non-reactive; thus people are familiar with halon fire extinguishers. Nevertheless, I shall gladly ammend to "carbon," or as you direct. (2) Lyra's just a fanciful allonym.
Like it, especially the refreshing rhymes in the first verse
What does nuclear plant have to do with anything besides the fact that it rhymes with can't?
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