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Love doggerel (Free verse) by thavimatola
Lyra is as slow to woo, As halon is to fission. But her kiss inspires you As liquor does elision. These attributes will make you do The things she says you can't, Like an erring worker who Comes drunk to the nuclear plant.

Up the ladder: Watching My Son Sleep.
Down the ladder: sex sex sex!

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.8333335
Weighted score: 4.9551764
Overall Rank: 8722
Posted: September 29, 2003 8:01 AM PDT; Last modified: September 29, 2003 8:01 AM PDT
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[n/a] Caducus @ 62.105.119.105 | 29-Sep-03/9:28 AM | Reply
Don't get it? help !
[6] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 | 29-Sep-03/11:13 AM | Reply
I don't really get it either, but I like the reference to the drunkard working at the nuclear plant.
[7] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.146.100 | 29-Sep-03/11:32 AM | Reply
Cute.
[n/a] thavimatola @ 209.94.133.143 | 29-Sep-03/11:52 AM | Reply
Points of possible confusion: (1) Doggerel is bad verse. (2) halon doesn't fission easily; fission is a nuclear process. (3) elision is a technical word for slurring.
[2] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 195.92.67.74 > thavimatola | 29-Sep-03/3:42 PM | Reply
halon n. chem. any of various gaseous compounds of carbon, bromine and other halogens, used to extinguish fires.

What?

a)Halons are compounds (molecules), fission is a nuclear process.
b)The elements in these molecules have lower atomic numbers than iron, so they wouldn't spontaneously fission anyway (their nuclei have a lower mass than their component nucleons)

I did just find out that "lyrate" is a word meaning "lyre shaped" though, which is pretty excellent.
[n/a] thavimatola @ 209.94.133.143 > ?-Dave_Mysterious-? | 29-Sep-03/5:52 PM | Reply
(1) Halon is generally understood to be deadening and non-reactive; thus people are familiar with halon fire extinguishers. Nevertheless, I shall gladly ammend to "carbon," or as you direct. (2) Lyra's just a fanciful allonym.
[8] richa @ 81.178.213.239 | 29-Sep-03/1:34 PM | Reply
Like it, especially the refreshing rhymes in the first verse
[6] boldsilence @ 68.11.251.86 | 26-Jun-04/2:19 PM | Reply
What does nuclear plant have to do with anything besides the fact that it rhymes with can't?
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