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Love doggerel

Member since 2003 · Posted 29 Sep 2003 · 8 comments

Lyra is as slow to woo, As halon is to fission. But her kiss inspires you As liquor does elision. These attributes will make you do The things she says you can't, Like an erring worker who Comes drunk to the nuclear plant.

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[n/a] Caducus 29-Sep-03/9:28 AM Reply
Don't get it? help !
[6] J.B. Manning 29-Sep-03/11:13 AM Reply
I don't really get it either, but I like the reference to the drunkard working at the nuclear plant.
[7] http://mulberryfairy 29-Sep-03/11:32 AM Reply
Cute.
[n/a] thavimatola 29-Sep-03/11:52 AM Reply
Points of possible confusion: (1) Doggerel is bad verse. (2) halon doesn't fission easily; fission is a nuclear process. (3) elision is a technical word for slurring.
[2] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? › thavimatola 29-Sep-03/3:42 PM Reply
halon n. chem. any of various gaseous compounds of carbon, bromine and other halogens, used to extinguish fires.

What?

a)Halons are compounds (molecules), fission is a nuclear process.
b)The elements in these molecules have lower atomic numbers than iron, so they wouldn't spontaneously fission anyway (their nuclei have a lower mass than their component nucleons)

I did just find out that "lyrate" is a word meaning "lyre shaped" though, which is pretty excellent.
[n/a] thavimatola › ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 29-Sep-03/5:52 PM Reply
(1) Halon is generally understood to be deadening and non-reactive; thus people are familiar with halon fire extinguishers. Nevertheless, I shall gladly ammend to "carbon," or as you direct. (2) Lyra's just a fanciful allonym.
[8] richa 29-Sep-03/1:34 PM Reply
Like it, especially the refreshing rhymes in the first verse
[6] boldsilence 26-Jun-04/2:19 PM Reply
What does nuclear plant have to do with anything besides the fact that it rhymes with can't?