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sex sex sex! (Free verse) by FreeFormFixation

Red-lipped and lovely, she wrapped herself around me. a breadbasket continental shelf shifted below as i struggled for Footing. Blue-lipped and lonely, i cringed as your fingers touched me. isolated on the ocean floor i withered below, and my bubbles were Bursting. White-lipped and lively, she strapped her legs around me. a rickety wooden floor creaked below and i begged for Mercy. Black-lipped and lewdly, i pine for you to soothe me. clawed eyes cauterized burned below. i blindly sang, I'm Empty.

Shuushin 10-Oct-03/6:01 AM
The only better title I can think of is "beer, beer, beer" (j/k).

Another really nice bit of work. Cool format - it suits the piece.




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