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autumn angst

by skaskowski

Member since 2001 · Posted 9 Oct 2003 · 2 comments

the universe howls from holes in the sidewalk, the death-season is upon us. that rain is all you see tonight, death from above from the trees. the clouds cover up the light at dusk smothering pillows of water. we're all just paper to blow in the wind, ignorant scraps of indifference.

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[5] Shuushin 9-Oct-03/7:59 PM Reply
A prepositional phrase slugfest.

I think Kansas said it best with, "we are merely indifferent scraps of ignorance, all we are is indifferent scraps of ignorance ..."

Consider a ";" after "wind" ("therefore" usage, actually, all of your commas here could be semi's) - keep or toss (as usual).
[n/a] skaskowski › Shuushin 9-Oct-03/9:24 PM Reply
to the top.