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Magnets & Cross-Eyed Children (Free verse) by Bachus
I came to you in need You followed me with lies A gravity compressing with no compromise A silence as heavy as all of the steel You could put in a gun, Or chasis on wheels. I have for you something, but it is a secret. I have for you something, you will never deserve. A perfect attraction, and I'll let you keep it. A glass crackling symphony Of garulous verve. When I'm done, you can kiss my ass As you make those Indians move I'll be your future shadow's past & bring the devil's sassiest groove. And in fact if my memory serves me right Which it always does You were not much to remember Now that magnets buzz.

Up the ladder: Landmine
Down the ladder: Almost forgotten

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.428571
Weighted score: 5.384202
Overall Rank: 3227
Posted: July 31, 2003 12:29 PM PDT; Last modified: October 10, 2003 12:54 PM PDT
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Comments:
[8] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 31-Jul-03/1:07 PM | Reply
sweet father of nearsighted little-leaguers!
[1] Thom @ 64.12.96.237 | 1-Aug-03/8:37 PM | Reply
Cross eyed children and magnets....must have gotten shot with a BB gun. Be careful if you go for an MRI!
[5] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.234.241 | 10-Oct-03/5:30 PM | Reply
This poem is nowhere near as excellent as the title would suggest.
[n/a] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 11-Oct-03/5:18 AM | Reply
Puts the physics back in metaphysical -

I really like the sounds made by
"you will never deserve" ... / "of farulous verve"
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