Re: Its raining by caitydee	10-May-04/7:09 PM
"The rain storms" delete "rain"; not too shabby. Stays I think to the right side of pimple - but only barely. What else u got? Fire it up.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-May-04/5:41 AM
Nice, sparse - very much like the word "Sleam" have you tried it without any punctuation?
Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	14-May-04/8:46 AM
Hello Fraser! Welcome to Poemranker! Thanks for posting such a great poem! A/S/L?
regarding some deleted poem...	14-May-04/10:24 AM
Okay. I'm bored with you now.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-May-04/12:43 PM
I had such high hopes....
Re: Bashing through the woods by INTRANSIT	14-May-04/12:53 PM
This went completely over my head. Here's a nine because I could never picture a snake with breasts, no matter how hard I tried - until now. Thank you.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-May-04/1:59 PM
--> "unchanged his expression" can u do something with that?
Re: In the Land of Bob by Bobjim	14-May-04/2:02 PM
liking the title.
Re: Washing-up Hands and Disgruntled Underarms by fevriere	14-May-04/2:06 PM
did you mean "hart" is in a male [red] deer? quite nice, though maybe a few too many "is"s and "was"s
Re: On the Discovery of the Hated Tree and Another T.V. Dinner by MacFrantic	17-May-04/9:10 AM
Arborists, I think. And "we [treepeople]" Good rhyme with contraire. Nice title. Ever read "poison tree"?
Re: Sarah's Song by wilco	18-May-04/6:52 PM
Pretty. I'd like it flow a little more - quite a few one line sentences and the many prepositions, articles and pronouns don't help the cause. Still, some lovely language in there.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-May-04/2:05 PM
yes - a break now and then is, as Martha would say, a Good Thing.
Re: Something's gone wrong by zodiac	21-May-04/3:45 AM
eh. I thik you did some wrong things in here on purpose, but its popular; generated lots of interest and votes - so 3 points for that.
Re: Tony Blair's sagging purple johnny by Stephen Robins	21-May-04/1:23 PM
Another diaper-full of the best you can do. And you spelled "color" wrong, again.
Re: Ten by horus8	22-May-04/5:24 AM
A fresh thought well said.
Re: Catharsis by wilco	22-May-04/12:35 PM
Yep, thats a good one; good use of the form. Consider replacing "Walking", it's implied and the space could be better used to express the mood. the wine/mine rhyme, btw is a good coupling and the long "i" sounds work well. when you say "contemplating a swift descent" are you implying she will go down [on you] quickly (or vice versa), or are you saying something will be leaving soon and quickly?
regarding some deleted poem...	22-May-04/12:54 PM
Good form Sasha. I like the topic too - they are strange birds, someone was telling me about them just this week.
regarding some deleted poem...	22-May-04/12:56 PM
hey ed, not bad, not bad at all - I'm not crazy about a rhyming cinquain tho.
regarding some deleted poem...	22-May-04/1:00 PM
Excellent.
Re: Cicada Years by seanlb1	24-May-04/8:43 AM
Some nice angles in there, I find myself wondering what's it all about? A feel good poem well made.