Re: knots... by anatheman	6-Sep-02/8:41 PM
my sister has got you pinned...lol! i would say days..fuck hours...there are so many knots here that it's gordian, or freudian, or perhaps pathetic and pointless..therefore you fail..so flush! my kale gun has a bead on way...i pray you're not allergic to9 calcium..like the the last one..bend over please..t'ankyou.o
Re: More 7-Eleven holdups. by Bachus	6-Sep-02/8:35 PM
thanks...have you tried the soup? i hope you have...i believe your id has been developing these days also...you'll have to excuse me..i have to step out for the friday night hustle...we'll speak again soon. bye.
Re: More 7-Eleven holdups. by Bachus	6-Sep-02/8:02 PM
hey sis! thanx...could you revote later when you get a chance..i re-edited...the wife and kids home too so, you know...if you want to talk to nad. love jb.
Re: wHEN mY wATER rUNS dRY by Sigh'ense...	2-Sep-02/6:00 PM
i expect better from you young man...fix the capital problem a whisper is always heard before a shout and it's not at all stylish...but if you did something like.....when my water runs......[i crawl swear] the crop that..........[cranium sigh]there is no healt......[cataract clear] you know what i mean? be more creative with your() and<> and ``~~~~~''//// trust me it's much more effective than just shouting...and also look up an ode...i hardly would consider this a royal point to be made...it's definitely lyric....for a run down on style buzzez check out horus8's last 5 or six poems and also nentwined does some style flaring contrasts occasional and there are quite a few others, but you'll see it when you see it, and this is only 50% there...i could whip this bastard into shape in ten minutes if i was your editor...shame realy...let me know...i might be able to get you in on my calander...let me know. carry on.h
Re: the art of dreaming (screaming) by brazen	2-Sep-02/5:38 PM
alright...change the title to "the art of dreaming (screaming), and change "ground" to 'stud'...and "pound" to 'shudder' ...change the word "the" to "no" and vice versa...to create a more courageous approach to a poem that's been written 5 million and twenty eight third times. change the word "my" to 'that'..trust me...oh and switch "birth" and "death" also...this is your editor speaking...if you don't make these changes i will not be held accountable to the damages rendered.a
Re: Wondering by anagram	2-Sep-02/5:21 PM
i really was looking for any reason to pull out my kale gun on this one.....but the last three sentences...made me think saturday morning cartoon symbolic brain washing at it's finest. jung would have grinned briefly...briefly.
Re: A Few Minutes' Reflection by longships	2-Sep-02/5:16 PM
i question the question marks. otherwise it's labia majora implora and honeysuckled bee thigh. 8/10u
Re: The Astronomer's Lament by Christof	2-Sep-02/5:12 PM
congratulations something of yours that didn't make me want to clocktower the rifle scope.
Re: The Call of Duty by waltfreakinwhitman	2-Sep-02/4:55 PM
i see you're fond of torpedoing. i'm fond of nothing.i'm not fond of you. henchman..
Re: God's Rod (toilet drink poem) by horus8	2-Sep-02/4:40 PM
is this why the europeans and canadians despise you?..nay..nay...you sir, are an unlit minora..
Re: Ignored by PK	2-Sep-02/4:38 PM
the missing conjunctions and past tense seeping into present....maintains the pieces dynamic...barely...7/10?
Re: Life Jade by OneFingerAnswer	1-Sep-02/6:32 PM
i say ten! cuz of the fourth line. a mistake that saved the piece. 10/10/10/biglistlessbirds.l
Re: -=Dark_Angel=- & The Canon Episcopi by Bachus	1-Sep-02/6:27 PM
i wasn't reposting it 'spuds' (doylum's nickname) i re-edited it, there were some unsavory typos before...and besides no one will stumble upon it anyway cuz nentwined and d.a have rigged the fucking random effect.elitist bastards! down with the facist pigs!y
Re: Variance of the tapeworm by horus8	31-Aug-02/7:16 PM
no.
Re: Award shows make my cock hard, but you don't by Bachus	31-Aug-02/7:12 PM
please stop...he starts(axel rose to run up and down the stage, but he's no young thang anymore, so he winds up winding himself bad than he can't finish singing welcome to the jungle it's a bit sad. really.
Re: Variance of the tapeworm by horus8	31-Aug-02/6:27 PM
D.a! damnit! you are a bastard, and no fun...i really thought you you were a cream filled doughnut and not a doghnutless cream, ah well...maybe next time our tango will be more static and less stated. luv the one who was but wasn't that which you found worth talking silent shot puts for the love of track and field and the 'game' i am touched by whovers creation that was and moved to break wind and drop some friends off at the pool...cordialy yours, forevered! and sooner than you think. prepare!
Re: Last Words by anagram	31-Aug-02/6:02 PM
no.
Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8	31-Aug-02/5:51 PM
to late .bachus did that with da's comments in a geishas burlesque~aforethought. sorry next
Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8	31-Aug-02/5:37 PM
unfortunately your user name has everything to do with it..you fucking chose it! and that says alot, oh maybe you were just kidding, and what if i only saw you twice, doesn't change what i saw...and i will prove to you just how fucking self righteous you sound by posting a piece of all of your comments i've cut out, and then you can be the judge of yourself...i keep a paper trail to back up my arguments...i just think it's a little fucking egotistical to give advice on something none of us even remotely comprehend, proof in that look around you! AND FUCK YOU WITH your evaluation of time for who, i'm supporting two fucking people in a rent zone three times your budget with a mouth full of cock in the trenches...while you sit in orange country teaching what creative writing? i fucking dare you to quit your job and for three years try to make a fucking living in the indusrial machine 'art' 'artist' my fucking left nad...nobody gives a shit about that..only what they can make a buck on, and destroy the beauty of...you missed your window...go preach to the preachers daughter she needs your fucking geomancy much more than i ever will....feed that chicken beinge, and tell me the future. here let me tell me for you...better batten down the hatches kid cuz here...it...comes...some, highs,some lows, some wins, some losses...blah blah blah keep your head up, blah blee vlah...it's always been and it always will, and there is no way to teach it...so you end up sounding, on screen extremely self righteous. sorry, i'll be the first to mention all of my faultes, but why do you cling to this pathetic approach...fuck shut up and write about some other pretty bird that gets knockerd up. again and again...or perhaps "the trouserless three" the clergy cospiracy..blah blee blah. horse shit! fucking avon horseshit no wonder you fucking are chummy with christoff, you have alot in common.alot.
Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8	31-Aug-02/4:58 PM
because you sound ridiculous and self righteous, as if you're above it all...and for the sake of whatever lets just say two of the five (actually closer to ten) you didn't falter and forget a line..there...you also didn't appologize then giggle and go back to read it again from memory for a crowd of hormonoley inept coffee tasting brutes going wow sweety i like your tits keep on reading that high falutin trash talk, i'm gathering up a chubby over here....who cares..what difference does it make? oh so what even god's wife is above making mistakes and appologizing? you're right...folks she's never appologized for anything and she's right...i'm just attacking her, because i'm insensetive and in a rut?........you are hardly worth your two cents let alone the pocket dig. sorry, you can keep it, no appologys...i know when i'm bested...i'm just going to go piss in the corner now and pretend that god really does have a wife and if he does, i now know the reason behind his absented presense here, you obviously have everything under control.