Re: I'm Aboard by Ali_cat018	2-Oct-03/12:37 PM
I like the train metaphor, I would suggest working some more train related words in there and maybe working with the flow a little
Re: paper boats by sally6479	27-Sep-03/10:18 PM
I like some of the ideas and the memories that you are talking about, but it kind of falls apart and rambles a little towards the end. I bet you could put it together better.
Re: personality by irishfolksuicide	25-Sep-03/9:44 PM
made me snicker.
Re: sewer rat by irishfolksuicide	25-Sep-03/9:42 PM
never thought I could like a poem about a rat so much!
Re: a comment on Here I go again by tadpole	25-Sep-03/9:34 PM
appreciate the response, thanks
Re: Boy by clark187	24-Sep-03/2:42 PM
cute, like the parts about it being like a painting or pastel drawing
Re: a comment on Plum diggity by tadpole	14-Sep-03/7:18 AM
Well it is usually found only around this time of year Furthermore, you profile indicates that you could find some near . . .
Re: If I Wrote The Perfect Poem by toward	12-Sep-03/2:01 PM
I like it!
Re: Recycle by Patsy	7-Sep-03/9:58 AM
(same comment as for your "30,000 Feet" poem)
Re: 30,000 feet by Patsy	7-Sep-03/9:55 AM
I don't really understand it but part of it I find myself liking. . .what is it all about?
Re: Why by J.B. Manning	7-Sep-03/9:53 AM
I like how it flows. . .but suggest that maybe the last line should be directed elsewhere.
Re: 'Till Then by sliver	7-Sep-03/9:45 AM
How do you write like that! I really like how you almost trick the reader to think you are talking about something else and then leave them with a tear in their eye. . .well at least me
Re: Boy's Hell by shadowaura	5-Sep-03/11:32 AM
pretty good PS ignore SupremeDreamer it's better that way
Re: a comment on Plum diggity by tadpole	4-Sep-03/7:31 PM
you wouldn't say that if you tasted it
Re: Driftwood by GekoHawaii	4-Sep-03/4:09 PM
oh man, I really like this one, I'll have to read more of yours
Re: a comment on none by tadpole	4-Sep-03/2:59 PM
thanks, maybe I'll try and rewrite it sometime
Re: cold sonnet by <~>	4-Sep-03/2:59 PM
really really like it, just a little wordy in some parts for me
Re: a comment on none by tadpole	3-Sep-03/4:07 PM
yeah it was kinda rushed, thanks for the honesty. . .about doing better, I just wrote it to put something on here since it wasn't fair for me to comment on everyone's without them having a chance to comment or rip on mine. . .I don't know if I'll write anymore
Re: a comment on none by tadpole	3-Sep-03/3:56 PM
whoops, yeah I see it now
Re: a comment on none by tadpole	3-Sep-03/3:55 PM
thanks, I don't have anymore