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Driftwood (Other) by GekoHawaii She drifts from me
O'er oceans deep
Now lost without a sail
I cry to her
Only to learn
She does not hear my hail
My darling love of Angels flame
Will live forever more
Not in me, nor by my side
But on an unknown shore
I gave you all
Broke down the wall
That held you back from joy
And now you run
What's done is done
I'm no more than a toy
My darling love of Angels flame
Will live forever more
Not in me, nor by my side
But on an unknown shore
I love you though
'spite what I know
About that mask you wear
I pray you die
With a lucky guy
Who's name you're proud to bare
My darling love of Angels flame
Will live forever more
Not in me, nor by my side
But on an unknown shore
So now I'm all alone
Doomed always to roam
For love, new life, a home
And one to call my own
Up the ladder:
Down Lovers Lane
Down the ladder:
Spinning, reeling
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Posted: February 6, 2003 6:49 PM PST; Last modified: February 6, 2003 6:49 PM PSTWeighted score: 6.042857 Overall Rank: 1224 Comments:
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horus8 @ 24.126.113.154
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7-Feb-03/10:26 AM
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"I'm no more than a toy" I'm no more than your toy. This is a lyric, also, by the way. 8.
I really really like this one. The rhyme scheme is different at the end so it draws your attention to it more. Well done once again.
oh man, I really like this one, I'll have to read more of yours
nice flow and good rhymes and good story
Would you agree that the song "Driftwood" by Travis is the most insidious and unnecessarily popular song ever?
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