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I'm Aboard (Free verse) by Ali_cat018
I don't hear the whistle, but I know I'm on the train of life. I try to keep it on the track, but I know I'm not the conductor. I will it to stay the course, through times of happiness and strife. Trains can't turn around and revisit a station it has already passed. Only continue on a plotted plan and hope it did what it was supposed to. If life's train were to have turned around for me, it would have certainly crashed. I know I'm on the path, this thing called life will take me. I can only do the best at every moment or station that I know I can do, Because I know in the end, this wonderful confusing train will let me off, right where I'm supposed to be.

Up the ladder: Coagulated Sentences
Down the ladder: My Random Girl

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.2
Weighted score: 4.904638
Overall Rank: 9829
Posted: October 2, 2003 12:25 PM PDT; Last modified: October 2, 2003 12:25 PM PDT
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[7] tadpole @ 152.163.252.164 | 2-Oct-03/12:37 PM | Reply
I like the train metaphor, I would suggest working some more train related words in there and maybe working with the flow a little
[n/a] J.B. Manning @ 129.44.35.24 > tadpole | 2-Oct-03/1:27 PM | Reply
I agree with Tad. What is it called when you use one thing to discribe another? Like a poem that speaks of hot rods, but it's really refering to something sexual?
[1] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 | 3-Mar-05/6:36 AM | Reply
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