| Re: hells atrium by crwncka1 |
28-Aug-03/10:43 AM |
... well, atleast the title was good.. but the poem severly disappointed me.. you didnt do your title justice.. luring me to read this wasnt cute, or a good joke.. bleh
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| Re: heart & soul by crwncka1 |
28-Aug-03/10:45 AM |
... _sigh_ ... cmon now, this is one big cliche scrawled to torture me eyes...
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| Re: shadows by crwncka1 |
28-Aug-03/10:47 AM |
here, lets sum this up with an overused quote:
"life passes most people by"
pfft. 0
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| Re: Chrystal lane swift want's me, bad. by horus8 |
28-Aug-03/1:54 PM |
i like. made me chuckle.. put a smile on my face.
So, just wondering, what did crystal lane swift do to inspire you to write this? did he beg to suck your cock so much that you became irritated to a point of killing him poetically? looks like it.
blessed with 8.
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| Re: Birds of Paradise by Domus |
28-Aug-03/2:49 PM |
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get a plane ticket? ;/ 7.
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| Re: The Shack by Domus |
28-Aug-03/2:51 PM |
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no.. this doesnt do it.. i didnt think my I'm Back poem could be made worse or done in a crappier fashion.. but you convinced me.. really.. what the hell was the purpose in making this poem? 0
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| Re: opening time? by wormsy |
28-Aug-03/2:52 PM |
short, sweet.. but im left hanging.. why?
tip: if your going to do miniatures.. make sure you dont leave any holes in the paper when you turn it in.
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| Re: $ by Crakyamuni |
28-Aug-03/2:54 PM |
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and you dare to belittle my poems? crawl back into your fucking hole you worthless fraud. 0
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| Re: Easter Egg Soup by kthay |
28-Aug-03/2:57 PM |
hrmm.. childish.. makes me wonder: didnt your remember that the sun exists, and that its hot? do you remember that chocolate tends to melt when heated?..
slightly funny though.. ill give you that.
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| Re: Naughty Word Game by kthay |
28-Aug-03/2:59 PM |
.. if your goal was to capture the mental workings of children, then ok, im not going to step on this.. because you did it well.. the cute innocence and crap..
but cmon, couldnt you insert a "goddamn it" or "shit".. ok, ok, im being picky.. -sigh-
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28-Aug-03/3:01 PM |
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| Re: death by crwncka1 |
28-Aug-03/3:03 PM |
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title sucks.. death is a dead subject, it takes a master to give it life, your not fit for the job.. 0
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
28-Aug-03/3:05 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
28-Aug-03/3:06 PM |
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... settle.. youve burned out.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
28-Aug-03/3:07 PM |
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um.. ok, maybe im lacking the mental fuel, but could you explain.. because.. i dont get it.. but nice ascii work.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
1-Sep-03/6:21 AM |
I suffer an extreme case of psychotic neurosis, obsessive in nature, accompanied with sadistic goals and a need to exterminate all traces of his adversary.
Lengthy consideration of the patient brings me to conclude that there is little hope of helping him forgive his so-called enemy, which means we shall never be able to start healing his extreme insecurity.
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yup, yup.. i can bullshit and play doctor too, but i still wouldnt tag myself one, because i have not studied to learn the craft of therapy.
And I am not an egotistical shithead who needs to be labeled Dr. and not Detective.
I also think his theory about me thinking detectives are inferior to doctors is his own feelings and not mine.
My theory is that he desperately feels he is above the level of detective and must seek vengeance for being disgraced with what he considers the "lesser" of the two occupational titles.
Yes, yes, theres much to consider.
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| Re: Shi by William Delacroix |
1-Sep-03/6:46 AM |
ok ok, nice detail, nice twisted humor with the introduction of the wife.. but i still think its a failed poet glorifying his shame that resulted in suicide lol..
and how the fuck does he accomplish making an impact?
i can imagine headlines:
"Crazy Poet Slices Stomach To End His Hunger."
that doesnt make an impact.. it makes parents scared when their child comes out of his/her room and says "i want to be a poet mommy and daddy!" in the morning right after they read the headline.
"Be a lawyer honey"
despite that, this poem deserves an 8 in my opinion, doesnt get a 9 because of the so called purpose of the poets bloody and painfull suicide.
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| Re: Danuta by deep-as-a-puddle |
1-Sep-03/6:48 AM |
-Think happy thoughts johnnie-
can you get any cuter? 4
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
1-Sep-03/7:20 AM |
I am NOT a gentleman, i am a barbarian, who is engaged in a romantic obsession with his BattleAx.
The love of blood is a holy practice, the sight of it
dripping from the curved blade causes me to tremble in joy.
A barbarian is true to nothing, but what he feels is right, he fights for his honor, and needs no social acceptance.
To be accepted means nothing, for the honor of battle
shall always be the only judge in the barbarians code.
I am a killer. I am a man who knows the holy deed of murder. I am one who shall fight till the last man dies, and will not hesistate to run blindly against odds that spell his end.
I am what it means to be free, to soar, i am the living dream of perfection through the brutal scripture of evolution.
Amen.
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| Re: Boys with Guns by Hostileintent |
19-Sep-03/7:36 AM |
I have heard of, and have seen such a picture.. not pleasant.
the repetition makes it seem like your starting to stammer, as if gripped by anxiety or nervouseness.. at first i thought it out of place, but then you mentioned that you lived in such a place, and it made sense..
was that the purpose? or was it simply done to give more force to emotion? (im all curiouse this morning)
overall, 8
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