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opening time? (Free verse) by wormsy
Doctor Foster went to Gloucester on a stolen bus but when he got there the shops were shut and his eyes were full of pus

Up the ladder: Watercolor Afternoon
Down the ladder: Dream

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.25
Weighted score: 4.910598
Overall Rank: 9574
Posted: August 28, 2003 11:46 AM PDT; Last modified: August 28, 2003 11:46 AM PDT
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[n/a] richa @ 81.86.253.156 | 28-Aug-03/1:39 PM | Reply
like the first two lines, admittedly the first is nicked.

Set up well but flounders, why are his eyes full of puss?
[5] Don-Quixote @ 66.81.156.79 | 28-Aug-03/2:52 PM | Reply
short, sweet.. but im left hanging.. why?

tip: if your going to do miniatures.. make sure you dont leave any holes in the paper when you turn it in.

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[n/a] Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.30 | 12-May-04/3:09 AM | Reply
I've always assumed that, in the original, the half rhyme was meant to imply that really Dr. Foster had stepped in a piddle right up to his middle, and it was in fact a sewage related incident.
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