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hells atrium (Free verse) by crwncka1
below the concrete jungle, lost in deep darkness, in this land of freedom, stuck in a sewer, is where i am at, with no one around, I stay in agony, unable to find light, I so desperately need, to guide me out, of my chilling misery, each day rots away, my life a little more, I can't take it anymore, nothing seems to work, in this life of mine, I think of you, the one I love, it gives me hope, it takes me away, for just a moment, a see light flash, a way out of this, a way back to you, or was I just, dreaming all this up, in my mind once again

Down the ladder: At First sight

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.7310586
Overall Rank: 11833
Posted: August 28, 2003 10:35 AM PDT; Last modified: August 28, 2003 10:35 AM PDT
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[4] Don-Quixote @ 204.31.182.127 | 28-Aug-03/10:43 AM | Reply
... well, atleast the title was good.. but the poem severly disappointed me.. you didnt do your title justice.. luring me to read this wasnt cute, or a good joke.. bleh

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[n/a] crwncka1 @ 209.245.229.205 | 28-Aug-03/1:49 PM | Reply
sucker
[n/a] Y2kSlamPoet @ 66.81.156.79 > crwncka1 | 28-Aug-03/4:33 PM | Reply
yeah.. i fell for it.. heres a shit flavored cookie
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 28-Aug-03/2:21 PM | Reply
Let me guess... you are a lonely piece of poop look for a way back up and in. That's just brilliant 10 CHUDS FOR YOU.
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