Re: 8:45 AM Dentist Appointment by http://mulberryfairy	11-Aug-03/8:16 AM
You're right it was good. I was expecting something simple so didn't quite follow it the first time. Second read was much better had an understanding of everything that way. Thanks for suggesting and sharing.
Re: a comment on Playa been caught in their games. (revised/new) by LuckyJoe	11-Aug-03/8:06 AM
Hard on the tissue collection laughing so hard you were crying? I see what you were saying... but thats by no means where I was going with it...lol
Re: a comment on Playa been caught in their games. (revised/new) by LuckyJoe	10-Aug-03/8:27 PM
Take a look now... I did that right after posting the reply to your comment the first time. Great minds think a like...hehe
Re: a comment on Playa been caught in their games. (revised/new) by LuckyJoe	10-Aug-03/7:46 PM
Thanks for the comment and I agree. I thought the same thing about despise myself. Was going to change it but didn't know to what. I saw dry when I read it over and didn't fix it it was ment to be die... but still doesn't fit. *shrugs don't write when you wake up make all sorts of silly mistakes* Will have to do some editing... but this piece of crap is here to stay due to not being able to write something that fits the title. Again I thank you mulberry :) Have a nice night.
Re: a comment on Weeping Willow by LuckyJoe	9-Aug-03/7:42 PM
I might reply to this later. When I said "you're more likely" I wasn't directing it at you. You're was everyone who drops out in a whole. Also wasn't saying that school has anything to do with mentality. But most who drop out aren't very smart, so their mentality is why they do drop out. Sorry if I wasn't very clear on that. To better clear other issues up if I sounded like I was whinning about my poems being ripped apart I wasn't by any means. I love this site already. Every where else just says my work is good and great... I need a challenge and here seems to be the place I'm going to get it. I'm loving it! So here..."Fuck you! I'm going to do better!" *grins* Better? Take no offence to the fuck you please... its all part of me trying to make my point.
Re: a comment on Weeping Willow by LuckyJoe	9-Aug-03/11:07 AM
If you want to get real technical being a high school drop out doesn’t make you any less intellectual than anyone else. Sure you’re more apt to be of a lower mentality due to that being the reason most dropout. However there are those who were intellectually stimulated enough to be bothered with the simplicity of school. For those the boredom sets in like rigor mortis. Dazing at the wall spacing off dreaming about the freedom outside the prison of school. That’s why I dropped out, went to alternative school and got to set my own pace. Was done within eight months. Its not that I can’t understand the big words, I do. The whole Mr. Webster thing just complimented the statement above. Complimenting words and phrases, being a poet you should know all about that. Each line is meant to help one another in their quest of becoming a poem. Poetry is what has kept me alive and giving me a fighting edge in this life so it’s became part of my daily life. Being part of daily life means that its heard and shown in my dialect. Pity me all you want, but know that I don’t need your sympathy or profound ideas made with blind contempt eradicating my life. Have a nice day and again I thank you for your comments good or bad. Each comment gives me the chance to grow and better myself and my writing.
Re: A Poem For World Peace. by GAY AS FU*K	9-Aug-03/2:27 AM
Spent some time on this one I can see. Nicely done and I agree with most the points you made keep up the good work. -10-
Re: a comment on Can you believe this piece of shit was #1? by horus8	9-Aug-03/2:21 AM
I myself think that if the person can't write a comment of at least 100-150 characters they shouldn’t be able to vote. I love how when you have say even a single 10,9, and 8 you get hit with a 1 or a 0 no comment just a vote. If the person can’t say what they like or don’t like about the poem then they haven’t earned the right to vote. I myself don’t vote often… just sit back and comment here and there. Doesn’t mean I’m not reading. But some just don’t make me have the need to comment so I don’t vote on them either. If I can’t give a poem at least a 5 I refuse to vote on it. Maybe I’m just stupid *nods at self* that has to be it :)
Re: a comment on Can you believe this piece of shit was #1? by horus8	9-Aug-03/2:14 AM
I saw that you wrote it and saw how many hits it had so I had to come and see what all the fuss was about :) See ya around man... and nice "poem" by the way. Stick it to um!
Re: a comment on Weeping Willow by LuckyJoe	9-Aug-03/1:06 AM
Ok I'm confused as hell. If there isn't any images in my work then its filled with cliches. Heavy handed word drama? What exactally is that. I'm from Iowa talk to me in retart english because I don't understand. Cliches yeah what the hell are those? Talk to me like I'm human not Mr. Webster himself.
Re: a comment on Weeping Willow by LuckyJoe	9-Aug-03/1:01 AM
I thank you for sticking up for me but there is no need. I've grown used to having every little thing picked apart. I kinda like it. Sometimes I don't have a clue what the people are really trying to say... but life goes on. If its soemthing related to my work it can only make me and my writing that much stronger. However at the same time some people need to look at the art in form rather than what they themselves want to see and believe the form should be. Go look at some famous poems... these people would rip them apart too. Not saying any of mine are worth a shit... just trying to make a point and failing.
Re: a comment on Inet. mag. editors R jealous red haired Jews, oh and I'm 29 by horus8	7-Aug-03/3:36 PM
Smoke your pipe... hmmm whats in that pipe. I know some crazy poetry comes about when its the weezer in the pipe. *looks around with blood shot eyes* "Dude... (forgets what he was going to say so just sits there and laughs)"
Re: a comment on I Am a Snob, or, 'A Definition' by JakeBike	5-Aug-03/8:57 AM
I seem to be missing why your saying this to me. I said nothing to spark your anger or cause you to flame in my direction. He was talking about "pimple poems" which are often wrote by the poet just starting out. I didn't say they weren't good didn't say anything bad about anyone. I was simply agreeing with the author that everyone does start small. Posted an example... my first poem. Please explain how I'm talking out of my ass. Because as I see it you're the one doing that because what you've said makes no sense what so ever due to the comment you're repling to. Since I deviled the art doing the devils work that I'm confused as all hell.
Re: a comment on An Unreal Iowa December Night by LuckyJoe	4-Aug-03/6:32 PM
I do, do all that. Most my spelling problems are because its a word, just not the word that I want. Or I get to typing to fast, not paying attention and don't see that I've typed the wrong small word. Like if I might type is and not notice. We all do that at times though. Thanks for the suggestions and whats a person have to write to get a above a 6 from you? Think I've got a five a six and a 1 from you. The one with a five everyone else gave 10's :P (not being mean or mad, just asking what you're looking for in your reading) Have a nice day and take care. I'm surr to see you around...wavewave
Re: a comment on Return to Darkness... by loneshadow29	4-Aug-03/6:24 PM
It could be the language of love, yes. I was thinking more on the lines of the language of writing. Each new piece of work has its own language speaks in its own way and can often speak in ample amounts.
Re: Paintball's Flight by loneshadow29	4-Aug-03/5:48 PM
I'm not much about Haiku's but you do give good vision about painballs. I'll give a 9.
Re: Return to Darkness... by loneshadow29	4-Aug-03/5:25 PM
Loving the vocab sounded like some of my own work. Didn't see any repeating words where something else could have said the same thing. (I hate poems that use the same word to describe something over and over) It was very good... but I had a few spots I had to read over because it didn't quite flow. "fallen into shadow" end of line seven should be "fallen into shadows" Here is a 9 keep up the good work and keep the pen on the paper flowing out languages unknown :)
Re: Reminders... by loneshadow29	4-Aug-03/5:17 PM
I can feel it. Been that and had those feelings. Hurts to see the one you want more than anything walk away and out of your life. Hurts even more when you know they want the same things you want just can't have them. Reasons for not being able to have them due to the time of meeting in life. Such as both heading to different states for college. My heart feels for the pain and love which you speek of. Keep on writing and good luck. (Was giving 7 but here's 8 because I felt the pain spoke about.)
Re: a comment on An Unreal Iowa December Night by LuckyJoe	4-Aug-03/5:11 PM
Thank you for the comment. My grammer and spelling has always been pretty bad :( At one point in time I quit writing because I hated always having to have someone look my work over for errors. As I age it seems to get better but high school and middle school kids can still spell better than me...hehe
Re: a comment on Sex on bugs by LuckyJoe	4-Aug-03/10:22 AM
It does insinuate that it is a “roly poly.” That being ecstasy the drug. And I didn’t want the questions answered so much as the person reading to question themselves. It is a trash poem, that I know and did know when I posted it. I wrote it about a year ago maybe longer when I was stoned out of my mind. Thankfully I’m over my whole pothead phase that I went through. It was wrote while I was in one of those stoned mental states where everything seems perfect and so much cooler than it is. Its wrote to sound like its talking about one thing when it doesn’t directly talk about any one thing at all. The words were meant to be played so the reader could think something different every time they read it. A year ago when I showed it to everyone and showed them the questions they did think differently every time they read it. As well as made new questions that fit. I think at one time I had a list of around 35 different questions readers made that could have went either way.