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Sex on bugs (Free verse) by LuckyJoe
Sex on bugs. How hideous this sounds, As you find yourself trembling, In petrifaction of what it might be, These creepy crawlies rolling around on my body, As I’m toss and turn, so why do I yearn for these, I ask my partner “Oh, Pretty please.” And then I’m told to get on my knees, As I think “They won’t do what I want, sleaze.” Then I feel a pill rubbed accost my mouth as a tease. I move quick to the pill and swallow it whole, Oh dear god, am I going to gage, Then I reflex, relax and just breath, A pleasant aroma intoxicates me, Causing my full release of hormones, I pounce from my knees with intent to please, Amongst your neck I get lost, Only to kiss and caress, Down your body my path doth lead, Until forth your lips I do come, Knowing well I’m going to get me some, As I ease myself on you I feel full penetration, Oh can it be so, is this finally our introduction, To bring forth the sensation of our life time, Now as it matters not if its day or night, We’ve just started an intimate fight, I wonder now if we’ll go on like this till early morn, Could this bring us our first born, Oh just like that, who cares now of what we might later mourn, Yes Oh Yes like that matters how? The chills I feel them uhhh skate down my spine, There right thereee oh yes they are, Not one of ohhhhhh many ahhh, Ahahaa but euhhh many for sure, This is better then nature, My mind is asker, Feelings all that of a blur, Numbing of nerve for sure, No longer can I make noise, Every thought and impulse directed, Loving you never will you be neglected, But now is the time that was selected, To reality I come as every whim erupts forth, All sexual senses feeling ready to explode, As I clinch and spasm, The bumps now emerge from my skin, My body is filled with ecstasy, Running pure taking place of my blood, Next to you I lay, Looking over with a smile, You’ll have me forever my spouse, But who in this house wears the blouse? Asleep and still you lay, Now I am at bay, Slowly I creep away, As the door closes softly, I wonder am I going away from my dreams; Or am I off to my dreams. *************** If you decide you want to read over this poem again here are a few questions to ask yourself. Perhaps you'll think of a few more like them as you read. Here they are... Did you think the person was a guy or a girl? Did the guy or girl take the pill, or not? Did they have sex, or was the guy or girl just in intense thought? Did the guy or girl leave or stay afterwards?

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Posted: August 3, 2003 9:25 AM PDT; Last modified: August 3, 2003 9:25 AM PDT
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[10] Druid_Girl_1984 @ 209.214.109.172 | 3-Aug-03/12:00 PM | Reply
sex on bugs......interesting.
[6] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 3-Aug-03/2:00 PM | Reply
Did you think the person was a guy or a girl?
Did the guy or girl take the pill, or not?
Did they have sex, or was the guy or girl just in intense thought?
Did the guy or girl leave or stay afterwards?

let's answer these shall we?

1. Neither, I thought they were you
2. Yes, but it was no pill it was black cock.
3. Neither,they mudwrestled their egos and lost miserably
4. Both, but astroprejectedly.
[n/a] LuckyJoe @ 206.72.7.22 > horus8 | 4-Aug-03/6:55 AM | Reply
Thanks for the vote and the comment. The comment was that of humor and thats what the poem was supposed to be. Just something totally off the wall compared to my norm :)
[n/a] LuckyJoe @ 206.72.7.22 > horus8 | 4-Aug-03/6:53 AM | Reply
Nice comment thanks for the humor :)
Have a good day.
[0] Don-Quixote @ 66.81.155.168 | 3-Aug-03/9:00 PM | Reply
holy fuck.. LEAVE POEM RANKER.. this is the worste pile of shit ive ever seen. fucking christ.. torture!!! stop it before i fucking chop you into a caesar salad. 0
[n/a] LuckyJoe @ 206.72.7.22 > Don-Quixote | 4-Aug-03/6:52 AM | Reply
You may have thought that it was total shit... hey what ever flips your skirt. But one, refrain from using profanity please. I've not sworn at you; so you have no reason to swear at me. Two treat others as you wish to be treated (if you wrote something that was total shit I would reply saying to try something different because what you just needed some help). Three I'm going to laugh at you and your remark both now. Remarks from people like you are worth about as much as a toilet bowl filled with feces... lots of crap.
Just because one poem wrote by a person doesn't quit your tastes and or likings doesn't mean everything they write is going to be the same. But I understand you have a fetish of sounding all big and bad while stroking your joke behind your computer screen. Rock on, what ever gets you off. More power to the pimples that act up like yourself needing popped. Nothing is more tasteless than that of puss filled membranes.
Thanks for your comment... have a nice day may your fetish filled strokes give you great pleasure at the expense of others.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.128.166.34 > LuckyJoe | 4-Aug-03/8:26 AM | Reply
Does his "use of profanity" really upset you? Please tell me exactly how it makes you feel. Thanks.
[n/a] LuckyJoe @ 206.72.7.22 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 4-Aug-03/8:48 AM | Reply
Not so much the use of profanity but over use. I have a bad itch about over use of profanity. Mainly because over using profanity takes away anything intellegent contained in the sentance. Had he said "That fucking sucked." Wouldn't have been any big deal... but every other word was a cuss word... hard to take anyone serious with a vocab like that. Even if they're mad and yelling at you wanting to kick your ass. All I can seem to do is laugh when people talk like that.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.128.166.34 > LuckyJoe | 4-Aug-03/9:23 AM | Reply
Of course you WOULD have a bad itch about the OVERuse of profanity. Because someone who overuses profanity uses precisely that quantity of profanity which is excessive. But let me ask you this: If someone told you to jump off a cliff, would you do it? Exactly my point. We aren't here to follow orders. We're here to entertain, and to educate. Because education is the key, and without it how can anyone, let alone someone who overuses profanity, look a child in the eye and say, truthfully, and without prejudice, "You'll be a man, my son"?
[1] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 4-Aug-03/8:13 AM | Reply
luckyjoe-
this is poorly written, and entertaining in a pre-teen, wow SEX! kind of way. you give everything away; you give nothing away, and you do it without skill. i suspect you plan on beoming a teacher, since you gave us a list of reading-comprhension questions at the end.

insteadof being impressed by your misguided sense of your own cleverness, may i humbly suggest you study the english language?

that is all.
[6] http://mulberryfairy @ 216.195.144.59 | 4-Aug-03/9:45 AM | Reply
I thought the pill was a "pill bug", you know, a "roly poly", (from the lobster family, no less), so I was too grossed out to answer any of your comprehensive questions.
[n/a] LuckyJoe @ 206.72.7.22 > http://mulberryfairy | 4-Aug-03/10:22 AM | Reply
It does insinuate that it is a “roly poly.” That being ecstasy the drug. And I didn’t want the questions answered so much as the person reading to question themselves. It is a trash poem, that I know and did know when I posted it. I wrote it about a year ago maybe longer when I was stoned out of my mind. Thankfully I’m over my whole pothead phase that I went through. It was wrote while I was in one of those stoned mental states where everything seems perfect and so much cooler than it is. Its wrote to sound like its talking about one thing when it doesn’t directly talk about any one thing at all. The words were meant to be played so the reader could think something different every time they read it. A year ago when I showed it to everyone and showed them the questions they did think differently every time they read it. As well as made new questions that fit. I think at one time I had a list of around 35 different questions readers made that could have went either way.
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