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Playa been caught in their games. (revised/new) (Other) by LuckyJoe
Running your games,
To bad weâre not all the same.
Wanted this so bad,
A chance you had.
Tried to play on me,
Now Iâm gone see.
At home alone you cry,
Filled with pity wanting to die.
Tears flow from sorrowful eyes,
Pity you got caught between your lies.
Thinking of the ways I mesmerize,
Now Iâm only filled with despise.
Games didnât work well,
Now your heart begins to swell.
You were the player,
Understand Iâm the slayer
Play on,
Iâm gone.
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Heavy crit please. I never write with rhyme so I'd like to know how I
did and what needs to be fixed. Just wanted to try something I never do
see if I could shape my skills any.
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The rhyming thing didn't work. Wanted something different so here is
what I wrote to some what fit the title. Its going to be sore on your
eyes, I wrote it in five minutes. Have to jump in the shower and head
off to work. Here it is...
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Heart stops cracking like thin ice stressed with worry,
Where to hide this franticly searching,
Vision masked with smog everything now blurry,
Outside your door stands the man you love,
Inside your bed a naked love toy lays,
About to fall to knees break down over weighted,
Pleasure given to your heart by his touch,
Play these games for the thrill of winning,
Prove to yourself how easily you can master your lies.
Games about to end, another knock on the door.
Heart pounding, chest contracting youâre surrounded,
Sweating now consumed with thoughts of him leaving.
Why play your games if you donât want to lose,
Begin to cry a million memories flash before your eyes.
Another knock, traumatic froze by the shock.
Canât open the door youâll be found out,
Wonât risk your loving finding out youâre a whore,
Begin to bawl, upon knees to the door you crawl,
Open the door hoping for forgiveness,
No chance one glance tells it all.
Been caught in your game, thinks never again to be the same.
Stomach curls going to be sickâ¦was it all worth a little dick?
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.6666665
Weighted score: 5.1986713
Overall Rank: 4566
Posted: August 10, 2003 12:35 PM PDT; Last modified: August 10, 2003 8:02 PM PDT
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