Re: I Hate Andy Jeon by JoyLuck	1-Aug-03/7:38 AM
Lots of people cheered.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Aug-03/7:42 AM
At first, I thought the title said "Afternoon time for some snack"- I think it should be that "Afternoon, Time for a Snack". What do you have against drug users, anyway?
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Aug-03/7:46 AM
These are well put together pictures, and must take a lot of time for such a short insult. What makes it worth it for you? This reminds me of when we first had computers in school and you'd have the directions that said "type 13 O's, four capital X's, then 13 O's again. Push return." Then, after all of that counting and spacing, you'd get this picture of some disgusting looking elephant with uncertain boundaries.
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Aug-03/7:48 AM
Shouldn't walrus, if he is indeed as gay as you say, be wearing an upside down triangle on his sleeve or something reminiscent of the Holocaust?
regarding some deleted poem...	1-Aug-03/8:44 AM
You are so sweet. You forgot to work in Splashtown Funtown, where I will this weekend with my favorite lady, (who inspired "Blonde, Voluptuous Birdwoman") and my daughter.
Re: Malcontent by EAger to Offend	2-Aug-03/11:40 AM
Nice job. I like the flow except this one part: "Taken good care of by politics called "love" retarded defectives and mutants can rise above" Did you mean incestors or insistors- I could see how either might fit in.
Re: marlon by bearhead	2-Aug-03/11:49 AM
"This crazy dance holds all The flavor of bananas." I like this line, but think you should come up with a more specific adjective than "crazy" before dance.
Re: marriage by bearhead	2-Aug-03/11:55 AM
Good job, I like the way the shift from happiness to doom seems so quick, like in real life marriages. I don't think "knell" works there as knell is a kind of sound more than something you can ring. Saying smile and smiling two lines in a row was a little too close together.
Re: A Dreamers Cookery: Cosmic Gardener [edited] by SupremeDreamer	2-Aug-03/11:58 AM
Yeah! You left out an apostrophe in "mother earth's womb."
Re: The Chronicle by Fear of Garbage	2-Aug-03/12:07 PM
Great. A little on the prosey side with your grammatical, complete sentences (not that I can talk).
Re: Mind Puddle by justjay	2-Aug-03/7:25 PM
Interesting. The periods seem a little arbitrary.
Re: Perfection by justjay	2-Aug-03/7:31 PM
Keep thinking. "When you smile, You light up the room." has been written by every poet in their early work, but you can think of a different, better metaphor.
Re: I Can See the Sunset in Her Eyes by justjay	2-Aug-03/7:33 PM
Sweet. Better metaphors and descriptions on this one.
Re: POEM XXII by DonCalo	2-Aug-03/7:37 PM
So, you were so over the top horny that you came in your pants and turned the other person off? I really can't tell what extinguished your audience's craving.
regarding some deleted poem...	2-Aug-03/7:39 PM
This poem keeps on jumping back to recent and yet friendship is still misspelled. I like the ending, but think the mysterious "some people" aren't doing your ending too much justice.
Re: Grampa Morris by http://bandgeek	2-Aug-03/7:41 PM
That is dark justice. Group therapy anyone?
Re: A Circle Starts with C by rusty	3-Aug-03/8:03 AM
I love the Alice in Wonderland type feel, the mattress giggling, etc. What about this "phine" though? 10
Re: Tuning Fork by rusty	3-Aug-03/8:05 AM
Nice. I like the last three lines and the juxtaposition of the Easter Bunny or Boogie Man.
Re: Reptilian Evolution by DreamerSupreme	3-Aug-03/8:12 AM
I like that the narrator's probes identified this "jar of custard", but his conversion to mustard is something altogether different. Why did the narrator taste him anyway? I think skydive is one word. 10
Re: A Reporters Saturday Headline Review by Don-Quixote	3-Aug-03/8:21 AM
I would say "Section 8 housing" rather than "low income". If the devil can't fool the Housing Authority, who could?