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Malcontent

by EAger to Offend

Member since 2003 · Posted 2 Aug 2003 · Edited 2 Aug 2003 · 9 comments

Pleasures and pains perverted and tamed, ancestors, incestors numbered and named, lazy, glutonous, amnesiac purposeless, malfunctioning focus, uniquity gained. Taken good care of by politics called "love" retarded defectives and mutants can rise above natural animal instinctive survival the biomechanisms of impeccability. So, for ages inbred a freedom like lead twists manacled weight down onto my head. Supported, dependent, lamenting, lamented, psychosis cemented to living 'til dead. Free time abounds piling up in great mounds that the faults of my life can be hidden by grounds set to crumble - dry muffin sent assunder, befumbled. My steadfast denial scores the the cancer some rounds.

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[10] SupremeDreamer 2-Aug-03/11:35 AM Reply
insestors - webster doesn't recognize this word.. what is it sposed to mean? Same for uniquity.

other than that, this is a gigantic leap from your other works, im impressed. Blessed with 10
[n/a] EAger to Offend › SupremeDreamer 2-Aug-03/11:45 AM Reply
I like to make up my own words if they fit my rhyme or rythm better than the real ones - particularly if I figure that they are decipherable.
incestors - those who act on incest (sorry 'bout the type-o)
uniquity- just sounds better than "uniqueness"
Thanx for the 10. This is old and I used to be more brash.
[10] SupremeDreamer › EAger to Offend 2-Aug-03/11:48 AM Reply
ah, i thought it was incestors.

well, uniquity doesnt have my vote.. i say stick with the original spelling, but again its your poem, its good nevertheless.
[9] http://mulberryfairy › EAger to Offend 2-Aug-03/12:01 PM Reply
Uniquity is a George W. word.
[n/a] EAger to Offend › http://mulberryfairy 2-Aug-03/12:23 PM Reply
George W...Bush? How about "weapons of ass destruction"?
The difference would be that I know it's incorrect. But, don't you think it belongs in the dictionary? It's so much lighter than "uniqueness". I don't know. I need suggestions!!!
[10] SupremeDreamer › EAger to Offend 2-Aug-03/1:48 PM Reply
we can always sell the idea to webster.. ;)
[9] http://mulberryfairy › EAger to Offend 2-Aug-03/7:21 PM Reply
You are right, it isn't a George W. word if you KNOW it is not a real word. I love the uniquity of your vocabulary.
[9] http://mulberryfairy 2-Aug-03/11:40 AM Reply
Nice job. I like the flow except this one part:
"Taken good care of
by politics called "love"
retarded defectives and
mutants can rise above"
Did you mean incestors or insistors- I could see how either might fit in.
[n/a] bearhead 2-Aug-03/12:12 PM Reply
I've always found it fun to birth new words. Especially when nobody else knows the meaning.