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POEM XXII (Other) by DonCalo verboten love devours me
my body hungers for the taste
lips drip with words of honey
they extinguish your craving
Up the ladder:
She Won't Wait
Down the ladder:
EARTH Inc. Memo:
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Posted: August 2, 2003 1:31 PM PDT; Last modified: August 2, 2003 1:31 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.1430435 Overall Rank: 5378 Comments:
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SupremeDreamer @ 66.81.150.216
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2-Aug-03/1:45 PM
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verboten.. forbidden love.. ah.. cool, i learned a new word. Nice poem, welcome to ranker ville. blessed with nine.
So, you were so over the top horny that you came in your pants and turned the other person off? I really can't tell what extinguished your audience's craving.
lol..interesting interpretation but not my feelings
more along the lines of not being able to express our feelings for each other....last two lines express our relief when we finally can...or if i suppose
"Verboten love devours me
My body hungers for the taste Lips drip with words of honey They extinguish your craving." Could improve this.
suggestions?
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