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marlon (Free verse) by bearhead We are like gorillas
Never looking right at each other
~it might be a threat;
Trained circus apes are less
obvious than we~
This crazy dance holds all
The flavor of bananas.
And like a neanderthal
I just discovered fire
But don't yet have a salve
For the burns.
Up the ladder:
Prop a Panda
Down the ladder:
Joe-Joe's Retard Trinity Remix (There can be only one)
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Posted: August 2, 2003 10:45 AM PDT; Last modified: August 2, 2003 10:45 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.230521 Overall Rank: 4228 Comments:
Wow, what metaphors.
What similes, as well. this is fun. I wouln't hold "crazy" against you for this, as it sounds appropriately neanderthal.
nice symbolism
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The flavor of bananas."
I like this line, but think you should come up with a more specific adjective than "crazy" before dance.