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marlon (Free verse) by bearhead

We are like gorillas Never looking right at each other ~it might be a threat; Trained circus apes are less obvious than we~ This crazy dance holds all The flavor of bananas. And like a neanderthal I just discovered fire But don't yet have a salve For the burns.

http://mulberryfairy 2-Aug-03/11:49 AM
"This crazy dance holds all
The flavor of bananas."
I like this line, but think you should come up with a more specific adjective than "crazy" before dance.




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