Re: a comment on forwards by nentwined	8-May-04/2:38 PM
Hmm. I think I see what you're saying there, but it really doesn't seem out of place to me. The rainbow of all these tomorrows is hope (ish), so it in that sense it does happen before the tomorrows happen, and is thus present, and directly related to the tears, though not actually reflecting from them; it would be reflecting _in_ them.
Re: a comment on forwards by nentwined	8-May-04/2:26 PM
I suppose I'm not seeing what you're saying with s4l1-2... could you write out what you would see as the results of your suggestion?
Re: a comment on forwards by nentwined	8-May-04/2:10 PM
Thanks for the comments--my understanding is that 'forward' and 'fowards' are rather interchangeable, as 'toward' and 'towards', though I've seen arguments about both. Thanks for the comments--I know the angst of angst poems, but sometimes you (I?) just "have to do them", as much as I hate that. And I'm far too much of an attention-hound to write a poem and not display it for feedback; sometimes I really wonder where my ones and twos are. [[that's not a request, though!]]
Re: a comment on forwards by nentwined	8-May-04/1:27 PM
Thanks for the thoughts; I'll let them percolate some. :)
Re: Sonnet on an Operating Table by Sasha	8-May-04/12:02 PM
very cute. and points for being the first poster of the form.
Re: a comment on clay or mud (hertz donut version) by nentwined	6-May-04/1:24 PM
No other version as of yet. Yes, it is a regression. The thought is if I like the thought better, I will do a less regressed version of it. It was a ditty that came up while discussion some things with Aetius.
Re: There Is No Such Thing As A Poem by Aetius	30-Apr-04/11:53 AM
I really like half of the lines, here. And the idea behind it. Actually, the more I read it, the more I like the idea behind it. moving a six to a seven. favorite bits: monsters, ecstatic catharsis, and the syllabic trellises. :)
Re: a comment on do androids dream? by nentwined	28-Apr-04/12:04 PM
Indeed, I have, and thank you. :)
Re: The How To on Haikus by <Wankster>	23-Apr-04/3:08 PM
"you've mastered the haiku poem" -- 8. I can't tell if that's satire or a mistake. 6.
Re: a comment on Radiation Reflections by sarah	23-Apr-04/1:13 PM
The tone of the poem is very humerous, as if it were tongue-in-cheek. The flow of the first stanza, the fact that you rhyme "as they pleases", ... Perhaps the poem simply doesn't convey what you were trying to put into it.
Re: a comment on Seven Sins for Seven Men (Part 1) by wilco	22-Apr-04/2:08 PM
sorry, part one. la.
Re: Seven Sins for Seven Men (Part 1) by wilco	22-Apr-04/2:07 PM
nice, but where are the six other sins?
Re: The Price You Pay by Fear of Garbage	22-Apr-04/12:40 PM
interesting.
Re: Tribute To Edgar Allen Poe by Fear of Garbage	22-Apr-04/12:38 PM
I don't get it. Besides that, "aloud -> allowed".
Re: a comment on Oh boo by Modulo	22-Apr-04/11:32 AM
Though I think this should be a 'pimple' instead of 'free verse'.
Re: Oh boo by Modulo	22-Apr-04/11:32 AM
cute.
Re: a comment on do androids dream? by nentwined	22-Apr-04/10:34 AM
That's a beautiful quote, thank you. :)
Re: a comment on do androids dream? by nentwined	22-Apr-04/8:33 AM
One bright morning in the middle of the night, An android took pause from flight, Found a sheep lost from its owner, and from the roof she pushed it over.
Re: a comment on sitting at the cliff's edge by nentwined	21-Apr-04/7:13 PM
Thank you. With new eyes (it's been a while) I think I wholly agree with "clinging us tighter, each to the other". :)
Re: a comment on Thaw by <~>	21-Apr-04/2:40 PM
that would remove too much fun poking at folks' spelling?