Free verse № 65133
sitting at the cliff's edge
sitting at the cliff's edge,
I muse
that here is where I used to come
with lovers
when lovers there were
and we could imagine ourselves alone
in wilderness
when wilderness was scarce
and the world was full
and alone we'd be together and together
the world would fade
and all that would be was the two of us
and the rocks and the sea and windy gusts
clinging us each tighter to the other
and now the rocks and sea and windy gusts remain
while people a dream become
and sterile I,
or close enough
the last alive,
or close enough
peer over the edge,
or close enough
and long for city traffic.
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sitting at the cliff's edge,
I muse
that there is where I went
with my lover
when lover she was
and we could imagine ourselves alone
but for a horse
A fitting chaperone
for this lonely castle wall.
and alone we'd be together and together
the world would fade
and all that would be was the two of us
and the rocks and the sea and a hundred gulls
mocking our affection
and now the rocks and sea and windy gusts
only in my thoughts remain
and dying these dreams
(or close enough)
but one remains
(or close enough)
to be near that edge,
(or close enough)
I long for you and Scotland.
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the interjection of humour about getting near the edge of the cliff subtly adds a warmth and depth to the whole scene that is indispensible:
It is done in such a coy way (inserted into a solemn repetition) that is almost strong enough to oppose your claim of longing - leaving the reader with a sense of 'grinning nostalgia' for lack of a better term.
But, what is there works fine for me. It's a nice little piece with a vivid mood.
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yeah, I've got a bit too much traffic myself, but... at least I'm just dodging cars on a motorcycle. I'd hate to actually have to sit in it. (daily #*&$(#$ commute; 10-15 minutes if traffic's moving. 20-30 if it's not (on a motorcycle, being relatively safe). up to an hour, with a car, in such circumstances. or three, if it's really bad.
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