regarding some deleted poem...	16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
very cute, tight, concise, and numbing all at once. No complaints. :)
Re: My Tongue ..... and God by BadPoet	16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
=) Whoohoo bad poetry! ;)
Re: How Strange by T. Becquerel	16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
huh. innnnnnnnnnnnteresting.
Re: fashion sense by crin	16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
second line jumps the rhythm on a rocky path which isn't picked up elsewhere, or rather -- I spent most of the poem trying to find the groove and not getting one. I like the sentiments of the poem greatly. :)
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
plants are simpler than people. ;)
Re: skeletons by tat2dangel	16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
the last lines stumbles for me. maybe if you lead into it after cried with "..." and put a comma after "out for you"? I like "made a mess on the bathroom floor". I'm not too into the disease metaphor at the beginning, and ... "the victor is the one who reigns", as a tautology, sesms a bit out of place.
Re: Ask Dr 2 by notule	16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
whoohoo Odeon! =) Hmm. Sorry about the italics not working. poems aren't HTML enabled. oddly interesting poem though it really reads like prose to me. la.
Re: Have you ever heard of William Carlost Williams 24 by notule	16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
hmmmmmmmmmmmm. I like the respelled phonetics. I don't really get the poem. Color me stupid.
Re: Impatience always backfires 913 by notule	16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
are these really tonkas? the rhythms seem off. On a modem temporarily which is making me reluctant to look things up. :) I like more flow in the stuff I read, don't really understand what you're doing. Agree with hat you're saying here, at least.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
I don't get "you can't even remember your name in yesterday". first read it as "is yesterday". The rest of it is beautiful. =)
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
hmm. thoughts are good but I couldn't find a flow so it didn't impress upon me as well.
Re: -untitled- by althea7	16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
climacteric works perfectly syllabically, but I don't recognize it as a word other than as a derivative of climactic, which throws off a bit; (and your my pill should be you're my pill). very nice, though. =)
Re: My Sun by T. Becquerel	17-Mar-02/2:33 PM
I'm not quite sure I get this. You're personifying the action of fusion?
Re: brown is the eat feminine deoderant gross and stuff mmm styrofoam right? by skaskowski	19-Mar-02/12:32 PM
this is just kinda lame. not sure what you were trying for, but I'd guess you were trying for lame. so with that, kudos, but...?
Re: Lachrymalia by Lain	19-Mar-02/2:06 PM
just had to reiterate that I love the flow of this poem -- very lyric, I can see it working for slow and sweet to hard and heavy, or just about anything inbetween (other than 80's silliness, I think).
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Mar-02/2:12 PM
this stumbles all over the place; the ryhthm is chunky and the "dialogue" of the poem is rather unnatural -- people don't talk like that. Keep practicing, though; with practice, it will all come together. :)
Re: Cashmere by Tekara	19-Mar-02/2:18 PM
the first bit reminds me of metallica; I get the impression, by the end of the poem, that you were sick of either writing or revising it. The further along it gets, the choppier it is. And I don't get the business with fame/history/society.
regarding some deleted poem...	3-Apr-02/10:20 PM
easy enough to do. where would be a good spot in the menu system for it, do you think? responding to: ------------- Like the new look, but miss the recent comments section. I liked going there to see if the people posting were also critiquing. Plus it's interesting to compare what I thought to what others thought.
Re: Alone by roses are read	5-Apr-02/5:27 PM
I like the cage/ribs imagery, but the rhythm there throws me off. I also don't really get what you're trying to show me... you're alone... but... I don't feel it. I have a vague sense that you've been to the beach... maybe you saw other people that were alone there, maybe you saw other people that weren't... but I really don't feel anything. Tell us more?