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Alone (Free verse) by roses are read it's when i'm alone at night,
i smell the chlorine in my hair,
sunscreen and pizza
grease on my skin.
the cage of my ribs is tight
Up the ladder:
Louisiana Lovers
Down the ladder:
The Poop Machines
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Posted: March 27, 2002 6:56 AM PST; Last modified: March 27, 2002 6:56 AM PSTWeighted score: 3.9521685 Overall Rank: 13411 Comments:
Reminds me of summers at the beach
Not sure I get the meaning, but it's pretty good regardless.
Great last line, very evocative.
What's this about?
why is this on the worst list? it's not one of the worst. Roses are Read: read "Dorm Life." ring a bell?
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I also don't really get what you're trying to show me... you're alone... but... I don't feel it. I have a vague sense that you've been to the beach... maybe you saw other people that were alone there, maybe you saw other people that weren't... but I really don't feel anything. Tell us more?