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Alone (Free verse) by roses are read

it's when i'm alone at night, i smell the chlorine in my hair, sunscreen and pizza grease on my skin. the cage of my ribs is tight

nentwined 5-Apr-02/5:27 PM
I like the cage/ribs imagery, but the rhythm there throws me off.

I also don't really get what you're trying to show me... you're alone... but... I don't feel it. I have a vague sense that you've been to the beach... maybe you saw other people that were alone there, maybe you saw other people that weren't... but I really don't feel anything. Tell us more?




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