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The Poop Machines (Haiku) by dougsoderstrom We eat food,
We digest it,
And then we poop.
Up the ladder:
Alone
Down the ladder:
Paysage Moralise
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.95
Posted: September 20, 2002 1:59 PM PDT; Last modified: September 20, 2002 2:00 PM PDTWeighted score: 3.9500477 Overall Rank: 13407 Comments:
354?
Were that a proper haiku, i'd dance with glee. But it's fun nonetheless.
It's a fundamental truth.
Duh. So we need a college educated man to spell it out for the masses? Is that it? Please, what was your purpose in writing this.
POETANDKNOWIT WAS SERIOUSLY WOUNDED, BUT THE SOUL STILL BURNS.
Dear poetandknowit:
To remind you to take a good healthy shit. Doug
you're the worst god damn poet on this honkin' website and maybe in the whole world
Dear bondjedi:
Thank you......sweetheart! Doug
Your shit. Bobjim looks like the Shake' compared with this effort. Do you even know what a haiku is?
Dear cleverdevice:
Can you spell VOMIT? Love, Doug
the meaning of life revealed.
Dear Robert K Foster:
Good point! Doug
Um....Funny....Has a point, but....
that's definitely 10 material, definitely
Dear gorbichoff:
THANKS! Doug
that's definitely 10 material, definitely
i'm sorry i have to go take a crap, now
TAMARAG67:
An absolutely wonderful comment to a "not so wonderful" poem! Doug
I thought You wanted to rise above this sort of wallow. And going back this far to take another dip. Disgusting.
I'm referring to your recent responses to comments.
Dear Dovina:
Unfortunately, due to those things that have occurred in my life (too much to talk with you about at this time) I have been forced to walk through "the valley of shadow of death" waist deep far too many times! Anyway, it's not that I have anything against the eating of food...... it's just that, for whatever reason, it seems to always end up turning to shit! Love, Doug
I would have given this a 4, but after reading 9/11, I would give it an 11. Exquisite literature.
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Thanks. Doug
Your quite welcome.
Doug