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Cashmere (Lyric) by Tekara
Dreams of cashmere, Dreams of lace, the look of violence in your face. Dreams of money, and times gone by. The bullets fly and then you die. We watch the movies say, "Shoot to kill". The doctor says, "Just one little pill". They promised me life, clean and pure. From this bottle, my madness cure. A creature of the night am I. The sunlight's gleam hurts my eye. They say I'm different...weird, you see. Why can't they let me be me? I'm dying inside, suicide's not right. I will not change, it's time to fight. I'll not conform with your little pill. You have no right to change my will. You've told me of the riches that flow, of time ever endless, all "good" people know. You sold me a dream I cannot buy. You'll never understand why I cry. To your whims, I will not bend. Like the rowan in the forest, I'll stand again. And when you search history, looking for fame. You'll only find society's to blame.

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.65
Weighted score: 4.6665993
Overall Rank: 12235
Posted: March 16, 2002 1:15 AM PST; Last modified: March 16, 2002 1:15 AM PST
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Comments:
[6]... anonymous @ | 14-Sep-01/9:34 PM | Reply
freedom....
[2] nentwined @ | 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM | Reply
again, rhythm: "they promised me life" could be shortened to "they promised life". "Like the rowan" could drop the "the". I like it, though. :)
[2] nentwined @ | 19-Mar-02/2:18 PM | Reply
the first bit reminds me of metallica; I get the impression, by the end of the poem, that you were sick of either writing or revising it. The further along it gets, the choppier it is. And I don't get the business with fame/history/society.
[n/a] -=SeTTle=- @ | 12-May-02/9:02 AM | Reply
Can you lend me your Dead Can Dance CD / Give me a ride to Starbucks?
[n/a] Tekara @ 66.218.35.193 > -=SeTTle=- | 20-Sep-02/12:39 AM | Reply
I don't own a Dead Can Dance CD. In fact, I've never heard of them and Starbucks makes the crappiest coffee on the planet!
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