Re: Sweetness by swift_enterprises	10-May-02/9:09 AM
I rather like this. short, simple, sweet (and sour?)
regarding some deleted poem...	10-May-02/9:10 AM
ooooh, yum. I remember this (the first version, perhaps? I'll have to look). This has no stumbles and marches straight through in bliss. =)
Re: Enigma by BadPoet	10-May-02/9:11 AM
:rofl: beautiful. =)
Re: Avian Child by Tekara	10-May-02/9:14 AM
the first two stanzas lead in well. the third stumbles on "fly so high in my dreams" as overly cliched and as such unecessary to say in so many words. also, use of "it seems" unnecessarily is, well, unnecessary and feels like it was just put there to fit the rhyme and rhythm. the rest is rather mediocre. I think you have a wonderful start, though.
Re: Transient world by daryash-koh	10-May-02/9:18 AM
hmm. I actually like the rhythm building up, but only as taken seriosly; the last line, while ostensibly an amusing twist, doesn't really do it for me. Maybe if you kept running with the humor and tied it into the poem more?
Re: Fragrant Blossom by Jody Conn	10-May-02/9:19 AM
yum. =) the first line says it all, but the supporting lines are tasty as well.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-May-02/9:22 AM
Nope, v2 is definitely the one I remembered. This one seems to have little to do with v2 (well, it shares the same inspiration, I would guess)... ah, playa playa playa... the mausoleum, this? and other things, as well. :) I like the other one much better (but it's just different, so it's hard to say) but I'm having trouble reading this one on its own merit, now. This one is definitely more complex, richer. The other is more vibrant, more alive...
Re: Sleep Well by jriemerm	10-May-02/9:23 AM
ooh, yum yum yum. =)
Re: affirmative action by thelonefrobros	10-May-02/9:23 AM
uhhhhh. huh.
Re: Synergy by searching	10-May-02/9:30 AM
strange. this almost feels like a book report, with an allegory here and there and not much ... direct substance. but pretty nonetheless.
Re: nation by roses are read	10-May-02/9:33 AM
except for the top three lines, this reads backwards very nicely (perhaps better)? all in all, though, I don't get it.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-May-02/8:10 PM
very good statement. less so, poem.
Re: Hammered Nail by drjhoss	10-May-02/9:07 PM
an interesting twist at the end, but I'm afraid this reads more like notes jotted down than a poem... (and It's == it is, its == possessive)
regarding some deleted poem...	10-May-02/9:08 PM
umm...?
regarding some deleted poem...	11-May-02/10:16 PM
weird. :)
Re: Bring back the golden calf by rrrr	12-May-02/8:17 PM
I don't get it.
Re: Summer Vacation by weeb	12-May-02/8:17 PM
this is hilarious. :)
Re: granite hearts by david	12-May-02/8:20 PM
sweet, but weird.
Re: silence of the sky by david	12-May-02/8:20 PM
eh?
Re: Ionic Winter by david	12-May-02/8:20 PM
I don't get it, though I think I'd like to...